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Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.5

Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. 5
Art is an expression of human creative skill and imagination, typically in a visual form such as painting and sculpture. Every single individual can create an art beyond imagination while people born with inborn skill can create art at different levels. Here in this essay we will discuss about both the views. Firstly, nature itself has its beauty with blue sky, red land and green plants. There is no need for one to have an inborn ability. For example, a two year old child can scribble well, which is as well a part of modern art. I don't think there needs a special class for craft designing as nowadays kids are well known for making crafts from waste materials. A simple picture can become a painting with the mere help of a paint brush. With the development in technology and the use of social media like YouTube anyone can watch and make paintings, crafts and models. On the other hand, some people strongly feel art is an inborn ability. Most of the times it is hereditary where they acquire genetically from their artistic background. For example, it is a common trend in Bollywood industry that offspring follow the path of their parents. Additionally, despite the truth that anyone can create a profession, only those who with inborn talent can survive in this competitive era. To conclude, I strongly opine that anyone who has the strength and strong will for hard working can achieve their goals irrespective of their talent in the field of craft.
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is an expression of human creative
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and imagination,
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art
beyond imagination while
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people
born with
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skill
can create
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art
at
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different
levels. Here in this essay we will
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discuss about both
the views.

Firstly
, nature itself has its beauty with blue sky, red land and green plants. There is no need for one to have an
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inborn
ability.
For example
, a two year
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old
child can scribble well, which is
as well
a part of modern
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art
. I don't
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think
there needs a special
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class
for
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craft
designing as nowadays kids are well known for making
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crafts
from waste materials. A simple picture can become a painting with the mere
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help
of a paint brush. With the development in technology and the
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use
of social media like YouTube anyone can
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watch
and
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make
paintings,
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and models.

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,
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people
strongly
feel
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art
is an
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inborn
ability.
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it is hereditary where they acquire
genetically
from their artistic background.
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, it is a common trend in Bollywood industry that offspring follow the path of their parents.
Additionally
, despite the truth that anyone can create a profession,
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only
those who with
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talent can survive in this competitive era.

To conclude
, I
strongly
opine that anyone who has the strength and strong will for
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hard working
can achieve their goals irrespective of their talent in the field of
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craft
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe the government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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