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TPO 20 - Question 3Energy costs reach sky-high levelsHeating prices, and the university’s heating bills, reached record-high level this year. In an effort to reduce heating costs, the university decides to lower the temperature in classroom buildings on v.1

TPO 20 - Question 3Energy costs reach sky-high levelsHeating prices, and the university’s heating bills, reached record-high level this year. In an effort to reduce heating costs, the university decides to lower the temperature in classroom buildings on v. 1
In this contemporary corporate era, the concept of work from home has become tremendously popular. Although some people believe that it disrupts the daily family routine, but it has many benefits linked to it which appreciates this recent shift. Accentuating the side which supports the idea of work from home, I believe that the output is more when we stay at home since there are mitigated number of distractions like tea breaks, prolonged chatting sessions and much more. Moreover, it saves a lot of time. For example, working from our place will help us in ditching the prodigious and tiring traffic jams and as a result, the same time can be utilized for a productive output. To embark on the outlook which contemplates it to be a distraction, I reckon that bedroom, the comfortable and cosy place, make us lazier and hence the concentration for work might get dwindled. Apart from the personal front, this might also affect the daily family routine. To elucidate this further, while trying to work in peace, we would want a complete silence, henceforth preventing the use of noise making appliances like mixers, washing machines and much more. Furthermore, work from home, which demands us to work independently, restraints the benefits of peer learning, especially during the initial stages of career. To summarize this highly debated topic, I would opine that the utilization of this opportunity should be done sagaciously. In an early phase of a career, it is vital that peer learning and office experience are given paramount significance, whereas at a later stage when we are capable of working independently, this facility can elevate the efforts and concentration hence proliferating the outputs.
In this contemporary corporate era, the concept of
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work
from home has become
tremendously
popular. Although
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that it disrupts the daily family routine,
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but
it has
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many
benefits linked to it which appreciates this recent shift.

Accentuating the side which supports the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home, I believe that the output is more when we stay at home since there
are mitigated
number of distractions like tea breaks, prolonged chatting sessions and much more.
Moreover
, it saves
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
time.
For example
, working from our place will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us in ditching the prodigious and tiring traffic jams and
as a result
, the same time can
be utilized
for a productive output.

To embark on the outlook which contemplates it to be a distraction, I reckon that bedroom, the comfortable and
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cosy
place,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
us lazier and
hence
the concentration for
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work
might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
dwindled. Apart from the personal front, this might
also
affect the daily family routine. To elucidate this
further
, while trying to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
in peace, we would want a complete silence, henceforth preventing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of noise making appliances like mixers, washing machines and much more.
Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
from home, which demands us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
independently
, restraints the benefits of peer learning,
especially
during the initial stages of career.

To summarize
this
highly
debated topic, I would opine that the utilization of this opportunity should
be done
sagaciously
. In an early phase of a career, it is vital that peer learning and office experience are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
paramount significance, whereas at a later stage when we are capable of working
independently
, this facility can elevate the efforts and concentration
hence
proliferating the outputs.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay TPO 20 - Question 3Energy costs reach sky-high levelsHeating prices, and the university’s heating bills, reached record-high level this year. In an effort to reduce heating costs, the university decides to lower the temperature in classroom buildings on v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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