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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Disciplinary action action is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of disciplinary action action should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v.13

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Disciplinary action action is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of disciplinary action action should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 13
It is vital to remain as a responsible citizen in the modern era as the youngsters are susceptible to various methods of being spoiled. I completely agree with the statement that punishing the children at a young period would enable them to understand what is good and bad. Firstly, early age plays an important role throughout the whole career of an individual as the habits and qualities learned within that period is followed throughout the lifetime. For instance, a world without disciplinary action actions would be a total chaos as every individual would wreak havoc on others. In addition to that, disciplinary action actions are really important as they create an awareness among the society and will cause the residents to hesitate before committing a mistake. For example, the awareness that is created in our mind after touching a hot surface is similar to the effect of what disciplinary action does on the younger community. Finally, when it comes to the type of disciplinary action it is really compulsory to make sure that the act is within the human violations. Even though many people consider disciplinary action as an inappropriate act, instead of losing the life’s in future for majour crimes it is better to be punished in the childhood. The mentors and parents should be allowed to use a wooden stick to warn their children and must be allowed to use it only on extreme conditions. Moreover, individuals in childhood are vulnerable to many emotions. Therefore, isolating them among the family and in classrooms would make them realize their mistakes and will prevent them from repeating the same thing. In conclusion, disciplinary action is extremely important for a young kid to pursue on a better path, but it is really vital to limit the major disciplinary actions that cause serious issues on children should not be promoted.
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being spoiled
. I completely
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with the statement that punishing the children at a young period would enable them to understand what is
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good
and
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bad
.

Firstly
, early age plays an
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role throughout the whole career of an individual as the habits and qualities learned within that period
is followed
throughout the lifetime.
For instance
, a world without
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disciplinary
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actions would be a total chaos as every individual would wreak havoc on others.
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to that,
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disciplinary
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actions are
really
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important
as they create an awareness among the society and will cause the residents to hesitate
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before
committing a mistake.
For example
, the awareness that
is created
in our mind after touching a hot surface is similar to the effect of what
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disciplinary
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action
does on the younger community.

Finally
, when it
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to the type of
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action
it is
really
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make
sure that the act is within the human violations.
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many
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people
consider
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disciplinary
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action
as an inappropriate act,
instead
of losing the life’s in future for
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in the childhood. The mentors and parents should be
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to
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use
a wooden stick to warn their children and
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allowed
to
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it
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only
on extreme conditions.
Moreover
, individuals in childhood are vulnerable to
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many
emotions.
Therefore
, isolating them among the family and in classrooms would
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make
them realize their mistakes and will
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prevent
them from repeating the same thing.

In conclusion
,
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disciplinary
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action
is
extremely
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important
for a young kid to pursue on a better path,
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but
it is
really
vital to limit the major
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disciplinary
actions that cause serious issues on children should not
be promoted
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Disciplinary action action is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of disciplinary action action should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 13

Essay
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