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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful What is your opinion Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v.1

Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful What is your opinion Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1
Achieving success in the sports is dependent on the physical or mental tenacity is debatable. Some people claim, sports individual must be physically strong, however others claim it is the mental energy which is more essential to be successful in sports. This essay will discuss both the arguments and explain why mental strength is superior. On one side, physical power will give the necessary stamina for an individual to participate and complete the arduous sports task. For instance, an individual without a well built and well nourished body cannot think of participating in some of the sports like athletics, tennis, swimming or weight lifting. In reality, many of the sports personalities like Ussain Bolt, Serena Williams, and Murray have a strong muscle power which makes them effortless to win in the tournaments. Further these individuals do not get tired easily, unlike, other participants because, they can sustain extreme practice sessions. Therefore, in order to win in the sports competitions a man must be physically strong. On the other side, a psychologically strong person can become a successful sportsman despite, being physically weak. It is admittedly true that weight lifting requires lots of physical energy, but the winner in this game must possess a strong will power as well. Moreover, at times it is just the winning spirit that pushes a man to put that extra effort in order to win the match. For example, Sachin Tendulkar, who is the shortest in the Indian cricket team has broken all the world records and is currently the topmost batsman in the world. In conclusion, although physical durability is essential to become successful, but without a strong will power, success cannot be achieved in the field of sports. Therefore, in my opinion, it is the strong mental determination that makes a person successful in sports.
Achieving success in the
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is dependent on the
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physical
or
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mental
tenacity is debatable.
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claim,
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individual
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must
be
physically
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strong
,
however
others claim it is the
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mental
energy which is more essential to be
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successful
in
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sports
. This essay will discuss both the arguments and
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explain
why
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mental
strength is superior.

On one side,
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physical
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power
will give the necessary stamina for an
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individual
to participate and complete the arduous
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sports
task.
For instance
, an
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individual
without a
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well built
and well nourished body cannot
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think
of participating in
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some of the
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like athletics, tennis, swimming or weight lifting. In reality,
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of the
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personalities like
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Bolt, Serena Williams, and Murray have a
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strong
muscle
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power
which
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makes
them effortless to win in the tournaments.
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these
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do not
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, unlike, other participants
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competitions a
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man
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must
be
physically
strong.

On the other side, a
psychologically
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strong
person can become a
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successful
sportsman despite, being
physically
weak. It is
admittedly
true that weight lifting requires lots of
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physical
energy,
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but
the winner in this game
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must
possess a
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strong
will
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as well
.
Moreover
, at times it is
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the winning spirit that pushes a
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man
to put that extra effort in order to win the match.
For example
,
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Tendulkar
, who is the shortest in the Indian cricket team has broken all the world records and is
currently
the topmost batsman in the world.

In conclusion
, although
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durability is essential to become
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successful
,
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without a
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strong
will
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power
, success cannot
be achieved
in the field of
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sports
.
Therefore
, in my opinion, it is the
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strong
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mental
determination that
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makes
a person
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successful
in
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sports
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful What is your opinion Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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