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You recently red an article in newspaper and come to know that article was written by your freiend. Since you don't have the contact details for your friend. Write a letter to newspaper and mention. - What is the article about? - Why you need contact d v.1

You recently red an article in newspaper and come to know that article was written by your freiend. Since you don't have the contact details for your friend. Write a letter to newspaper and mention. - What is the article about? - Why you need contact d v. 1
Many people have a perception that advancement in technology, making them more connected with others, while some have opposite views. I think in the contemporary era, technology plays an important role and bring different people in touch with each other. In this essay, I will give my view with an appropriate example. On the one hand, Electronics gadgets brought so many convenient changes in everyone's life. Moreover, it has its own benefits to living humans. For example, due to Social Media such as Facebook, Instagram, Google Duo lots of human beings can keep in touch with their distant relatives and some school friends by Video calls and also with online chat. Furthermore it's also due to new and advance gym equipments people prefer to go to various health clubs, so they can stay fit and there also they meet different persons and make friends there too. According to one survey, Electronically items, play praise worthy role during a Covid19 situation in India during Lockdown when a billion of people stay indoors. On the other hand, there are also some advance effects of it. To begin with, some parents believe that due to extreme use of these gadgets their children are getting isolated as they involve themselves in games such as PubG and candy crush, etc. , so much that they forget their surroundings. Additionally, Due to using technique humans are getting physical ailments due to their dependency on these. According to one prestige survey by Oxford university, Old people, who living their lives without using these gadgets are more active and healthy. To recapitulate, Electronic devices are blessing for many others who wants to close with relatives and even with children who study abroad, only if they can use it in a proper way.
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have a perception that advancement in technology, making them more connected with others, while
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some
have opposite views. I
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think
in the contemporary era, technology plays an
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important
role and bring
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different
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people
in touch with each
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other
. In this essay, I will give my view with an appropriate example.

On the one hand, Electronics gadgets brought
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many
convenient
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changes
in everyone's life.
Moreover
, it has its
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own
benefits to living humans.
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,
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due
to Social Media such as Facebook, Instagram, Google Duo lots of human beings can
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keep
in touch with their distant relatives and
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some
school friends by Video calls and
also
with online chat.
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it's
also
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due
to new and advance gym equipments
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people
prefer to go to various health clubs,
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so
they can stay fit and there
also
they
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meet
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different
persons and
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make
friends there too. According to one survey,
Electronically
items, play praise worthy role during a
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Covid19
situation in India during Lockdown when a billion of
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people
stay indoors.

On the
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other
hand, there are
also
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some
advance effects of it. To
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begin
with,
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some
parents believe that
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due
to extreme
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use
of these gadgets their children are getting isolated as they involve themselves in games such as
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PubG
and
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candy crush
, etc.
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,
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so
much that they forget their surroundings.
Additionally
,

Due to using technique humans are getting physical ailments
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due
to their dependency on these. According to one prestige survey by Oxford university,
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Old
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people
, who living their
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lives
without using these gadgets are more active and healthy.

To recapitulate, Electronic devices are blessing for
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many
others who
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wants
to close with relatives and even with children who study abroad,
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only
if they can
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use
it
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in a proper way
.
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IELTS essay You recently red an article in newspaper and come to know that article was written by your freiend. Since you don't have the contact details for your friend. Write a letter to newspaper and mention. - What is the article about? - Why you need contact d v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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