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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.1

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The maps illustrate changes made to the road access to a city hospital in two years, 2007 and 2010. In general, it is obvious that there were more constructed added for public transport and an additional way to reach the hospital was also added. The city hospital was surrounded by a circular road named King Road. In 2007, the tree-lined Hospital Road was the only viable road to get to the hospital through the south end. Directly to the east of this street was the car park for both the staff and public usage. In addition, there was a separated bus stop to the east of the entire area. After 3 years, a remarkable transformation took place. The Hospital Road was cleared of trees and two roundabouts were put at its junctions with Ring Road and City Road. The car park to the east was also made available for only staff, as new public parking space was opened right to the east to the hospital. The bus station was located to the west of Hospital Road and could be accessed via turnings at both roundabouts on Hospital Road. Another roundabout was also installed far away from the area and to the southeast of the hospital.
The maps illustrate
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changes
made to the
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road
access to a city
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hospital
in two years, 2007 and 2010.

In general
, it is obvious that there were more constructed
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added
for public transport and an additional way to reach the
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hospital
was
also
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added
.

The city
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hospital
was surrounded
by a circular
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road
named King
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Road
. In 2007, the tree-lined
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Hospital
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Road
was the
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only
viable
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road
to
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get
to the
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hospital
through the south
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end
.
Directly
to the east of this street was the car park for both the staff and public usage.
In addition
, there was a separated bus
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stop
to the east of the entire area.

After 3 years, a remarkable transformation took place. The
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Hospital
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Road
was cleared
of trees and two roundabouts
were put
at its junctions with Ring
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Road
and City
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Road
. The car park to the east was
also
made available for
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only
staff, as new public parking space
was opened
right to the east to the
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hospital
.
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The
bus station
was located
to the west of
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Hospital
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Road
and could
be accessed
via turnings at both roundabouts on
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Hospital
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Road
. Another roundabout was
also
installed far away from the area and to the southeast of the
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hospital
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
205 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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