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You recently learnt that the best teacher you ever had will be retiring soon. Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected yo v.1

You recently learnt that the best teacher you ever had will be retiring soon. Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected yo v. 1
Education is the key element for a fostering child in many aspects of life. It is believed by few that small children ought to attend the pre-primary school first, then go to the primary school although others feel they must be at home. In this essay will delve in both the sides of the argument and draw an opinion. On the one side of the hand, parents who keep their young one once at home before they are eligible for the primary level believe that, they need loving and secure environment. This is the reason, where parents hold back their children at home instead of sending them to nursery. As they want to spend more affectionate quality time with them. For example, in China minimum age for school enrolment is 5 years, whereas in other country's nursery school age requirement as low as 1year old. So, countries like China, not only give parents of toddler a chance to enjoy their early childhood, but also let them have a profound attachment towards them. Consequently, parents cherish every moment they spent with their young once by deterring them from pre-primary education. However, on the other side, parents who allow their small children to nursery school, thinks it is an essential part which cannot be neglected because it helps them in overall development to face primary school easily. This means attending nursery broadens horizon to children in terms of social skills, cognitive skills and intellectual skills. They are encouraged to initiate a conversation with their peers, even if they are shy or introverts in nature. In order to make them feel more confident teachers motivate young students to participate and communicate more, which will be quite helpful for them to face any challenges in the next level of schooling easily. For instance, a study shows that the children who attended nursery school are more independent, outspoken, confident and talkative compares to who don’t opt for pre-primary school. Therefore, for these various reasons people think that small children benefit more if they go to nursery schooling. To conclude, Education plays a key role in the various parts of life, especially, developing child towards communication skills. Although children who stays at home, enjoy more time with their parents, but those who get enrolled in pre-primary school are believed to gain more. I strongly think children should go to nursery school to have a professional guidance at this early stage.
Education is the key element for a fostering child in
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many
aspects of life. It
is believed
by few that
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small
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children
ought to attend the
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pre-primary
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school
first
, then go to the primary
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school
although others feel they
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must
be at home. In this essay will delve in both the sides of the argument and draw an opinion.

On the one side of the hand,
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parents
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who
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keep
their young one once at home
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before
they are eligible for the primary level believe that, they need loving and secure environment. This is the reason, where
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parents
hold back their
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children
at home
instead
of sending them to
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nursery
.
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As
they want to spend more affectionate quality time with them.
For example
, in China minimum age for
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school
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enrolment
is 5 years, whereas in other country's
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nursery
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school
age requirement as low as 1year
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old
.
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, countries like China, not
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only
give
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parents
of toddler a chance to enjoy their early childhood,
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also
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let
them have a profound attachment towards them.
Consequently
,
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parents
cherish every moment they spent with their young once by deterring them from
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pre-primary
education.

However
, on the other side,
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parents
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who
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allow
their
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small
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children
to
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nursery
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school
,
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thinks
it is an essential part which cannot
be neglected
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because
it
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helps
them in
overall
development to face primary
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school
easily
. This means attending
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nursery
broadens horizon to
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children
in terms of social
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skills
, cognitive
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skills
and intellectual
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skills
. They
are encouraged
to initiate a conversation with their peers, even if they are shy or introverts in nature. In order to
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make
them feel more confident teachers motivate young students to participate and communicate more, which will be quite helpful for them to face any challenges in the
next
level of schooling
easily
.
For instance
, a study
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shows
that the
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children
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who
attended
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nursery
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school
are more independent, outspoken, confident and talkative compares to
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who
don’t opt for
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pre-primary
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school
.
Therefore
, for these various reasons
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people
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think
that
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small
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children
benefit more if they go to
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nursery
schooling.

To conclude
, Education plays a key role in the various parts of life,
especially
, developing child towards communication
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skills
. Although
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children
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who
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stays
at home, enjoy more time with their
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parents
,
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but
those
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who
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get
enrolled in
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pre-primary
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school
are believed
to gain more. I
strongly
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think
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children
should go to
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nursery
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school
to have a professional guidance at this early stage.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
One language sets you in a corridor for life. Two languages open every door along the way.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay You recently learnt that the best teacher you ever had will be retiring soon. Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected yo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
404 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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