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A friend has written a letter to you informing about his or her plan to visit your country/city. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: what he or she can do in your country/cityadvise him about the place he could stay atsuggest him/her what to v.1

A friend has written a letter to you informing about his or her plan to visit your country/city. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: what he or she can do in your country/cityadvise him about the place he could stay atsuggest him/her what to v. 1
It is true that the fresh water shortage is no more a local problem but a global crisis. Although the worldwide rise of demand has caused this crisis, the solutions are available to deal with the situation. This essay deals with the causes of fresh water shortages and its solutions. Firstly, the increased population has increased the demand of fresh water. The rise in human population has expanded more cities and households. AS a result, the usages of fresh water in household purposes has increased. Secondly, some industries also use fresh water for their production purpose. This leads to more wastages of this resource. Finally, the expansion of cities has created more demand for fresh water. For instance, the more people lead to more households, which in turn results in more demand for household purposes such as cleaning of utensils, cooking, toilet and bathing. Both government and individuals should implement the possible solution. In one way, the Government can do better the water management, such as installing smart meters, controlling water wastage and installation of recycled water unit. On another way, individuals can save more water by optimizing usage and reducing water wastage. Moreover, recycling and water management should become an important point in the society. For example, rainwater harvesting can provide a good solution. Additionally, Government can install a water-recycling unit to utilize wastewater. In conclusion, water shortage can be solved by active participation of the Government and society. The Government can save water on a large scale by optimizing water usages and rainwater harvesting. On the other hand, Individuals can also actively participate in doing so.
It is true that the
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fresh
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water
shortage is no more a local problem
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but
a global crisis. Although the worldwide rise of
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demand
has caused this crisis, the solutions are available to deal with the situation. This essay deals with the causes of
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fresh
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water
shortages and its solutions.

Firstly
, the increased population has increased the
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demand
of
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fresh
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water
. The rise in human population has expanded more cities and
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households
.
AS a result
, the usages of
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fresh
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water
in
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household
purposes has increased.
Secondly
,
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some
industries
also
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use
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fresh
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water
for their production purpose. This leads to more
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wastages
of this resource.
Finally
, the expansion of cities has created more
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demand
for
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fresh
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water
.
For instance
, the more
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people
lead to more
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households
, which in turn results in more
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demand
for
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household
purposes such as cleaning of utensils, cooking, toilet and bathing.

Both
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government
and individuals should implement the possible solution. In one way, the
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Government
can do better the
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water
management, such as installing smart meters, controlling
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water
wastage and installation of recycled
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water
unit. On another way, individuals can save more
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water
by optimizing usage and reducing
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water
wastage.
Moreover
, recycling and
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water
management should become an
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important
point in the society.
For example
, rainwater harvesting can provide a
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good
solution.
Additionally
,
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Government
can install a water-recycling unit to utilize wastewater.

In conclusion
,
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water
shortage can
be solved
by active participation of the
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Government
and society. The
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Government
can save
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water
on a large scale by optimizing
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water
usages and rainwater harvesting.
On the other hand
, Individuals can
also
actively
participate in doing
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so
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A friend has written a letter to you informing about his or her plan to visit your country/city. Write a letter to him/ her. In your letter, write: what he or she can do in your country/cityadvise him about the place he could stay atsuggest him/her what to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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