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Your colleague found another job and invited you to his/her farewell party. Unfortunately you are unable to attend it. Write a letter to him/her and say – Why can’t you attend the party? – Why did you enjoy working with him/her? – Offer him/her to v.1

Your colleague found another job and invited you to his/her farewell party. Unfortunately you are unable to attend it. Write a letter to him/her and say – Why can’t you attend the party? – Why did you enjoy working with him/her? – Offer him/her to v. 1
It is widely accepted that books take us to another world of imagination and visualization, which contribute immensely to one's logical reasoning. However, there is a trend of depending on immediate sources like the internet and other platforms for the purpose of knowledge and enjoyment. This essay will be discussing on the loosing significance of books. One of the reasons why people depending on other sources are that they give rapid results were in case of a book we take quite a long time to complete the reading. Moreover busy life with tight schedules attracted people to mediums such as the internet and this makes their life better. For example, searching a topic on the internet would take you only seconds, whereas relying on a book for the same would put you in hours for the same. Secondly, the updating of the books happens very rarely and it takes so long to get the latest edition. We live in a dynamic world where things get updated and upgraded in a matter of seconds and hence depending only on this books would definitely put you in a dilemma. For instance, the process like the creation and printing of a book takes months while updating of a data in other platforms takes only some hours or days. In a nutshell, now a days we have a plethora of sources for information as well as enjoyment and they all have outweighed books due to the matter of time. Nevertheless, people are much concern about spending their time on each constrains books are ignored to an extent.
It is
widely
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accepted
that
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books
take us to another world of imagination and visualization, which contribute
immensely
to one's logical reasoning.
However
, there is a trend of depending on immediate sources like the internet and other platforms for the purpose of knowledge and enjoyment. This essay will be discussing on the loosing significance of books.

One of the reasons why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
depending on other sources are that they give rapid results were in case of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
we take quite a long time to complete the reading.
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Moreover
busy life with tight schedules attracted
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to mediums such as the internet and this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
their life better.
For example
, searching a topic on the internet would take you
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only
seconds, whereas relying on a
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book
for the same would put you in hours for the same.

Secondly
, the updating of the
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books
happens
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very
rarely and it takes
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so
long to
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get
the latest edition. We
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live
in a dynamic world where things
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
updated and upgraded in a matter of seconds and
hence
depending
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only
on
Did you mean "these"?
this
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books
would definitely put you in a dilemma.
For instance
, the process like the creation and printing of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
takes months while updating of a data in other platforms takes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
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some
hours or days.

In a nutshell,
Did you mean "nowadays"?
now a days
we have a plethora of sources for information
as well
as
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
enjoyment and
they all have outweighed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
due to the matter of time.
Nevertheless
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are much concern about spending their time on each constrains
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books
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignored
to an extent.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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Charlemagne

IELTS essay Your colleague found another job and invited you to his/her farewell party. Unfortunately you are unable to attend it. Write a letter to him/her and say – Why can’t you attend the party? – Why did you enjoy working with him/her? – Offer him/her to v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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