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Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected your life. v.1

Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected your life. v. 1
Many countries of the world are experiencing many problems and one of them is rapidly growing population in cities. I believe with the help of government and people we can overcome these issues. To begin with, overpopulation can lead to a poor quality of houses. Cities are brimming with the people and due to overcrowding there are no space to construct houses for families. Moreover, homes that are already made not in good quality, because of less space, there are no heating and cooling system. Which leads to a number of health diseases, such as; pneumonia and dehydration. In terms of a solution for this issue government should provide well maintained housing and health care for all its citizens. Moreover, inflation is increasing in urban areas. It is being hard to buy everything from a needle to plane. The most of people visit cities to complete their basic needs. For example, clothing, food, and shelter. Also, rich people put their children for higher education in city schools, but poor people because of lack of money unable to study their kids, that is the main reason of inflation and illiterate people in rural areas. To address this issue, the legal authorities should provide all facilities in rural areas, so people do not need to travel in cities to complete their requirements. These facilities could be shopping malls, education services and medical support. In addition, if all these services will available in countryside areas, then, all the rural people will be able to take the advantages of these services, also, help the government to improve the economic condition of the country. In conclusion, it is clear that problems are caused due to growth of population. Yet, I think these issues can be solved if this collective responsibility shared between individuals and law firms.
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Many
countries of the world are experiencing
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many
problems and one of them is
rapidly
growing population in
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cities
. I believe with the
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help
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and
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people
we can overcome these issues.

To
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begin
with, overpopulation can lead to a poor quality of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
.
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Cities
are brimming with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and due to overcrowding there are no space to construct
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
houses
for families.
Moreover
, homes that are already made not in
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good
quality,
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because
of less space, there are no heating and cooling system. Which leads to a number of health diseases, such as; pneumonia and dehydration. In terms of a solution for this issue
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should provide well maintained housing and health care for all its citizens.

Moreover
, inflation is increasing in urban areas. It is being
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hard
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
everything from a needle to
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plane
. The most of
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people
visit
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cities
to complete their basic needs.
For example
, clothing, food, and shelter.
Also
, rich
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people
put their children for higher education in city schools,
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but
poor
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people
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because
of lack of money unable to study their kids,
that is
the main reason of inflation and illiterate
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people
in rural areas.

To address this issue, the legal authorities should provide all facilities in rural areas,
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so
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people
do not need to travel in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cities
to complete their requirements. These facilities could be shopping malls, education services and medical support.
In addition
, if all these services will available in countryside areas, then, all the rural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will be able to take the advantages of these services,
also
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to
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improve
the economic condition of the country.

In conclusion
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that problems
are caused
due to growth of population.
Yet
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
these issues can
be solved
if this collective responsibility shared between individuals and law firms.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected your life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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