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You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letterDescribe what you enjoyed about the courseSay how much cooking you have done since th v.1

You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letterDescribe what you enjoyed about the courseSay how much cooking you have done since th v. 1
With the advancement of time, now, income capacity of most people has increased than the previous time. Therefore, people are inclining more to expend on the different issues. Such trend of expenditure, of course, is a positive thing for any individual To begin, this tendency helps to provide mind refreshment of an individual. In other words, people can find enjoyment in any amusement centre by paying some charges, which revitalize any individual for further work. For instance, people can go for a holiday for a few days that helps to recharge them as a fresh mind for newly start. Thus, spending some money helps to provide new beginning. In addition, people can explore the new places by expending some portion of their earnings. What mean that going abroad in an unknown place or country provides an opportunity of a traveller to know about the culture, the food habit and the tradition of that area, and this could be only possible by allocating some finance from their savings. For example, out bounders from different parts of the Globe are allocating more money for exploring a new place. Therefore, finding the new things out from the various areas is another reason to spend. Moreover, people have expanded from significant parts of their savings to improve quality of life. More clearly, people are, now, affording huge budget to get the luxury apartment, a vehicle as well as improved diet so that their lifestyle could be luxurious. To illustrate, a renowned daily newspaper in Bangladesh published a report in 2018, one-fourth of the inhabitants in the Dhaka city are always ready to allocate their earnings for better life. To conclude, people are finding more opportunity to earn a lot than earlier time, and they are often spending their earnings in various ways. Affording this budget for various purposes is an indicator as a significant trend.
With the advancement of time,
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now
, income capacity of most
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people
has increased than the previous time.
Therefore
,
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people
are inclining more to expend on the
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different
issues. Such trend of expenditure,
of course
, is a
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positive
thing for any
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individual


To
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begin
, this tendency
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helps
to provide mind refreshment of an individual.
In other words
,
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people
can find enjoyment in any amusement
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centre
by paying
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some
charges, which revitalize any individual for
further
work.
For instance
,
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people
can go for a holiday for a few days that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to recharge them as a fresh mind for
newly
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start
.
Thus
, spending
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some
money
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helps
to provide
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new
beginning.

In addition
,
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people
can explore the
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new
places by expending
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some
portion of their earnings. What mean that going abroad in an unknown place or country provides an opportunity of a
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traveller
to know about the culture, the food habit and the tradition of that area, and this could be
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only
possible by allocating
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some
finance from their savings.
For example
, out bounders from
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different
parts of the Globe are allocating more money for exploring a
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new
place.
Therefore
, finding the
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new
things out from the various areas is another reason to spend.

Moreover
,
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people
have expanded from significant parts of their savings to
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improve
quality of life. More
clearly
,
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people
are,
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now
, affording huge budget to
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get
the luxury apartment, a vehicle
as well
as
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improved
diet
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so
that their lifestyle could be luxurious. To illustrate, a renowned daily newspaper in Bangladesh published a report in 2018, one-fourth of the inhabitants in the Dhaka city are always ready to allocate their earnings for better life.

To conclude
,
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people
are finding more opportunity to earn a lot than earlier time, and they are
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often
spending their earnings in various ways. Affording this budget for various purposes is an indicator as a significant trend.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You recently did a short course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letterDescribe what you enjoyed about the courseSay how much cooking you have done since th v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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