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your recently did a short cookery course The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course write a letter to the course director at the cookery school in your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done sin v.1

your recently did a short cookery course The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course write a letter to the course director at the cookery school in your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done sin v. 1
The carriers are becoming a significant aspect of human lives. Because everyone's life pattern depends on their job and the salary. However, the majority of people think that having an interesting job is more vital while others believe that having a high salary is more beneficial. But I believe, having an extra salary job is effective these days. There are several advantages and disadvantages to having an enjoyable job. Furthermore, when people doing a fascinating job, they could have more fun, a good mood and more satisfaction with their job. And also, when they do it happily the output would be impeccable. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages to having that kind of occupation. When a person has a low salary job he has to do more sacrifices and also, he has to limit his wants. Due to that, the money they earn might not be enough for living. But to get over this, people should balance these circumstances by doing what they like and earning enough money. By contrast, there are some positive and negative sides to doing a high salary job. In addition, doing a high earning carrier can earn a plethora of money and he should not have to worry about daily expenses and living costs. And also, he could has a better lifestyle. Nevertheless, there are negative effects too. When doing a job that a person does not like he could be stressful. And also, that could convert a person to a robot that only earns money. So to get rid of this, people should be more enjoyable from what they earn. To sum up, there are a variety of occupations in the world. And people able to choose a job that they want. There are advantages and disadvantages to every carrier. But in my view, I think having a high salary job is more convenient to live nowadays.
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people
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having
an interesting
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job
is more vital while others believe that
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having
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high
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salary
is more beneficial.
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I believe,
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having
an extra
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salary
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job
is effective these days.

There are several advantages and disadvantages to
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having
an enjoyable
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job
.
Furthermore
, when
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people
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doing
a fascinating
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job
, they could have more fun, a
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good
mood and more satisfaction with their
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job
. And
also
, when they do it
happily
the output would be impeccable.
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, there are
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some
disadvantages to
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having
that kind of occupation. When a person has a low
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salary
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job
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do more sacrifices and
also
, he
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limit his wants. Due to that, the money they earn might not be
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enough
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over this,
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enough
money.

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.
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earning carrier can earn a plethora of
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money and
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that a person does not like he could be stressful. And
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only
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rid of this,
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people
should be more enjoyable from what they earn.

To sum up, there are a variety of occupations in the world. And
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people
able to choose a
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job
that they want. There are advantages and disadvantages to every carrier.
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But
in my view, I
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think
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high
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salary
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job
is more convenient to
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live
nowadays.
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IELTS essay your recently did a short cookery course The cookery school asked for your feedback on this course write a letter to the course director at the cookery school in your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you have done sin v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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