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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback o this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the c v.1

You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback o this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the c v. 1
It is true that online learning has become increasingly popular. Internet-based learning offers some advantages of teaching development. Personally, I believe studying online to have more benefits rather than drawbacks. On one hand, online courses have lack of direct interaction. People don't have a chance to engage face-to-face with others, and they have to rely on written forms of communication. Similarly, students who study online do not come into direct contact with teachers and other students, and this could have a negative impact on peer support, discussion and exchange of ideas. For example, whereas students in traditional courses can attend seminars and even discuss their subjects over coffee after lessons, online learners are restricted to chatting through website forum areas. It influences a huge impact on their preparation. On the other hand, online learning has become more convenient that campus-based learning. Firstly, students are allowed to study in a flexible way, meaning that they can work whenever and wherever they want at the same time. Secondly, it opens access to anybody whose aim is to study, regardless of age, location, ability and background. Finally, education fees are not available for many students. Online courses suggest a less amount of payment to take any courses. For instance, some students cannot afford to rent a flat in big cities, in this case they choose to pay some amount for studying from their comfort place. In conclusion, while I recognise the possible disadvantages of online learning, I consider it to be a positive development overall.
It is true that
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online
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learning
has become
increasingly
popular. Internet-based
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learning
offers
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some
advantages of teaching development.
Personally
, I believe studying
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online
to have more benefits
rather
than drawbacks.

On one hand,
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online
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courses
have lack of direct interaction.
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People
don't have a chance to engage face-to-face with others, and they
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have to
rely on written forms of communication.
Similarly
,
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students
who study
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online
do not
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come
into direct contact with teachers and other
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students
, and this could have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on peer support, discussion and exchange of
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ideas
.
For example
, whereas
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students
in traditional
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courses
can attend seminars and even discuss their subjects over coffee after lessons,
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online
learners
are restricted
to chatting through website forum areas. It influences a huge impact on their preparation.

On the other hand
,
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online
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learning
has become more convenient that campus-based
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learning
.
Firstly
,
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students
are
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allowed
to study
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in a flexible way
, meaning that they can work whenever and wherever they want at the same time.
Secondly
, it opens access to anybody whose aim is to study, regardless of age, location, ability and background.
Finally
, education fees are not available for
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many
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students
.
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Online
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courses
suggest a less amount of payment to take any
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courses
.
For instance
,
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some
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students
cannot afford to rent a flat in
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big
cities,
in this case
they choose to pay
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some
amount for studying from their comfort place.

In conclusion
, while I
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recognise
the possible disadvantages of
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online
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learning
, I consider it to be a
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positive
development
overall
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback o this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the c v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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