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You play sports eg football for a local team you recently heard that a player of your team is in a hospital Write a letter to your team mate In your letter you say how you feel about the news Ask about the treatment in the hospital Suggest some ways of ch v.1

You play sports eg football for a local team you recently heard that a player of your team is in a hospital Write a letter to your team mate In your letter you say how you feel about the news Ask about the treatment in the hospital Suggest some ways of ch v. 1
These days, people are ignorant of the importance of the natural world, and how disturbance in the ecosystem can impact their lives negatively. There are numerous reasons for this ignorant attitude. However, various steps can be taken to deal with this issue. There are many reasons why people tend to neglect the maintenance of the natural world. Firstly, their tight schedule and increased competition at the workplace force them to neglect everything except work. In other words, after spending 10 to 12 hours a day at work, a person is so tired and has little interest in participating in a discussion about maintaining our natural ecosystem. They would rather watch TV to relax their minds. Another reason is the lack of knowledge among people about a few detrimental practices which they follow in their day to day life. For example, people are unaware of the negative impacts of plastic bags on the environment. Furthermore, some people are not bothered about the disturbance created in the natural ecosystem as long as they can earn money from their evil practices. However, there are many significant ways to deal with the issue. Firstly, advertisements are the best way to draw public attention to this issue. When people watch TV programs for entertainment, they can be made aware of the significant benefits of maintaining balance in nature with the help of short ads. In addition to this, the authorities should rope in celebrities to promote environmental causes because they are more influential. For instance, Akshay Kumar promotes the ban on plastic bags, and a lot of his fans are persuaded not to use plastic bags. Secondly, strict punishment should be awarded for insensitive acts poaching because it will discourage hunters from continuing the practice of killing animals. Hence, disturbance in the food chain can be reduced to a great extent. In conclusion, the hectic schedule and inadequate knowledge among people are the major reasons why people are unable to understand how important it is to maintain the natural world; however, by using the social media effectively and with the implementation of strict policies, people can be encouraged to take care of the natural ecosystem.
These days,
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people
are ignorant of the importance of the
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natural
world, and how disturbance in the ecosystem can impact their
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lives
negatively
. There are numerous
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reasons
for this ignorant attitude.
However
, various steps can
be taken
to deal with this issue.

There are
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many
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reasons
why
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people
tend to neglect the maintenance of the
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natural
world.
Firstly
, their tight schedule and increased competition at the workplace force them to neglect everything except work.
In other words
, after spending 10 to 12 hours a day at work, a person is
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so
tired and has
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little
interest
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in participating in
a discussion about maintaining our
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natural
ecosystem. They would
rather
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
TV to relax their minds.

Another
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reason
is the lack of knowledge among
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people
about a few detrimental practices which they follow in their
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day to day
life.
For example
,
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people
are unaware of the
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negative
impacts of plastic bags on the environment.
Furthermore
,
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some
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people
are not bothered about the disturbance created in the
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natural
ecosystem as long as they can earn money from their evil practices.

However
, there are
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many
significant ways to deal with the issue.
Firstly
, advertisements are the best way to draw public attention to this issue. When
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
TV programs for entertainment, they can
be made
aware of the significant benefits of maintaining balance in nature with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of short ads.
In addition
to this, the authorities should rope in celebrities to promote environmental causes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they are more influential.
For instance
, Akshay Kumar promotes the ban on plastic bags, and
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a lot of
his fans
are persuaded
not to
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use
plastic bags.
Secondly
, strict punishment should
be awarded
for insensitive acts poaching
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because
it will discourage hunters from continuing the practice of killing animals.
Hence
, disturbance in the food chain can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
to a great extent.

In conclusion
, the hectic schedule and inadequate knowledge among
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people
are the major
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reasons
why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are unable to understand how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
it is to maintain the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
world;
however
, by using the social media
effectively
and with the implementation of strict policies,
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people
can
be encouraged
to take care of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
natural
ecosystem.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You play sports eg football for a local team you recently heard that a player of your team is in a hospital Write a letter to your team mate In your letter you say how you feel about the news Ask about the treatment in the hospital Suggest some ways of ch v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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