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You have just heard some good news about your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter- say how you heard the news- arrange a time to visit your friend at his/her house- explain what you will bring with you v.1

You have just heard some good news about your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter- say how you heard the news- arrange a time to visit your friend at his/her house- explain what you will bring with you v. 1
It is a fact that transportation has become a big part of modern life. While some people believe the best way to travel in the city is by car, others believe the bicycle is better. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain why I tend to agree with the former idea. Firstly, vehicles which are used non-renewable sources of energy are leaving lots of carbon print to our environment. To decrease this harm greener alternative should be preferred and bicycles are one of them. To clarify, bicycles are working with kinetic energy which applied to the pedals by people. Also, this movement is improving the human body in a very healthy way, unlike cars and other transportations. Amsterdam is a very popular example of a successful bike-friendly city. For instance, the most authentic way to see the city is by cycling and also there are around 500 km lanes which dedicated to just a bicycle. On the other hand, not all countries are having this type of infrastructure for cycling. It might because of the structuring of the city, or climate. To illustrate, in big cities or in a city with a snowy climate, it can be hard to reach everywhere in the city by cycling. In these types of circumstances, unfortunately, a bicycle is no more an option to the citizens and cars will be safer. Because of that, hybrid or electric cars should be preferred to help the environment and reduce the carbon footprints they left. In conclusion, the debate between which is better has both pros and cons. Although bicycles are healthier and greener, they are not suitable for every city’s transportation. Personally, I believe cars are more useful and by using hybrid or electric cars, the damage they are causing to our environment could be decreased.
It is a fact that transportation has become a
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big
part of modern life. While
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some
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people
believe the best way to travel in the city is by
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car
, others believe the
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bicycle
is better. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and
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explain
why I tend to
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agree
with the former
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idea
.

Firstly
, vehicles which are
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used
non-renewable sources of energy are leaving lots of carbon print to our environment. To decrease this harm greener alternative should
be preferred
and
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bicycles
are one of them. To clarify,
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bicycles
are working with kinetic energy which applied to the pedals by
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people
.
Also
, this movement is improving the human body in a
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very
healthy way, unlike
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cars
and other transportations. Amsterdam is a
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very
popular example of a successful bike-friendly city.
For instance
, the most authentic way to
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see
the city is by cycling and
also
there are around 500 km lanes which dedicated to
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just
a bicycle.

On the other hand
, not all countries are having this type of infrastructure for cycling. It might
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because
of the structuring of the city, or climate. To illustrate, in
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big
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cities
or in a city with a snowy climate, it can be
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hard
to reach everywhere in the city by cycling. In these types of circumstances, unfortunately, a
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bicycle
is no more an option to the citizens and
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cars
will be safer.
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Because
of that, hybrid or electric
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cars
should
be preferred
to
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help
the environment and
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reduce
the carbon footprints they
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left
.

In conclusion
, the debate between which is better has both pros and cons. Although
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bicycles
are healthier and greener, they are not suitable for every city’s transportation.
Personally
, I believe
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cars
are more useful and by using hybrid or electric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
, the damage they are causing to our environment could
be decreased
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have just heard some good news about your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter- say how you heard the news- arrange a time to visit your friend at his/her house- explain what you will bring with you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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