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You need to do more physical exercise Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you In your letter you should tell why you want to do physical exercise what type of physical exercise you are planning to do why you want your friend to join you v.1

You need to do more physical exercise Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you In your letter you should tell why you want to do physical exercise what type of physical exercise you are planning to do why you want your friend to join you v. 1
In recent years there has been a considerable rise in criminal activities. It is a common belief, that common people are committing the same crime as the murderer by giving them a death sentence. Instead, should be given life imprisonment. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the topic. First and foremost, there should be a strong investigation prior to the sentence. Most of the time, the guilty might have no criminal background and was never involved in any criminal activities. For instance, sometimes people do hurt others in order to save themselves or someone from getting hurt. Instead, they call medical emergencies and make every possible attempt to save the person. They should be given a little forgiveness and should not be treated like a real criminal. As a result, the common people would be saved from committing a crime by hanging someone who had no intention of a crime. On the other hand, the criminal who has motives behind a crime are the one's the law needs to deal in a harsh manner. Those are the perpetrators, society should be scared of. They are not fit enough to live in a society and should be given the death penalty. For example, there have been cases where people feel happy in killing someone. They enjoy the suffering of other people and won't stop after killing one person. Furthermore, the prison has limited space and no tax payers money should be used to feed people like them. As a result. Anyone who kills with a motive, should be hanged. In conclusion. Despite murderers being kept in prison are fed by tax payers. In my view, anyone who has committed a crime unintentionally doesn't deserve to be treated the same as one with motives and their cases should be given little leniency.
In recent years there has been a considerable rise in
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criminal
activities. It is a common belief, that common
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people
are committing the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
as the murderer by giving them a death sentence.
Instead
, should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
life imprisonment. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the topic.

First
and foremost, there should be a strong investigation prior to the sentence. Most of the time, the guilty might have no
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criminal
background and was never involved in any
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criminal
activities.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
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people
do hurt others in order to save themselves or someone from getting hurt.
Instead
, they call medical emergencies and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
every possible attempt to save the person. They should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a
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little
forgiveness and should not
be treated
like a real
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criminal
.
As a result
, the common
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people
would
be saved
from committing a
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crime
by hanging someone
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who
had no intention of a crime.

On the other hand
, the
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criminal
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who
has motives behind a
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crime
are the one's the law needs to deal
Consider replacing "in a harsh manner" with the adverb for "harsh"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a harsh manner
. Those are the perpetrators, society should
be scared
of. They are not fit
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enough
to
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live
in a society and should be
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given
the death penalty.
For example
, there have been cases where
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people
feel happy in killing someone. They enjoy the suffering of other
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people
and won't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
after killing one person.
Furthermore
, the prison has limited space and no tax payers money should be
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used
to feed
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people
like them.
As a result
. Anyone
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who
kills with a motive, should
be hanged
.

In conclusion
. Despite murderers being
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kept
in prison
are fed
by tax payers. In my view, anyone
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who
has committed a
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crime
unintentionally
doesn't deserve to
be treated
the same as one with motives and their cases should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
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little
leniency.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You need to do more physical exercise Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you In your letter you should tell why you want to do physical exercise what type of physical exercise you are planning to do why you want your friend to join you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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