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Writing task 1 (a letter)You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want t v.1

Writing task 1 (a letter)You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want t v. 1
Globalisation is a catchall term that refers to any activity that involves more than one country, to illustrate, travels from one country to another. The dramatic increase in transnational travel in recent years has sparked controversy over the potential impacts of this trend on individual countries, especially those new member states of globalisation. Some people are concerned that the upsurge in new arrivals will prompt local hostility against visitors, rather of promoting their understanding on mutual cultural background. This notion should be rejected as one can see many facts in favour of this development between countries. Firstly, the main reason why international travels would never bring conflict is rooted in the fact that both visitors and locals are economically motivated. International travel opens up opportunities for business development throughout the world. Entrepreneurs are interested not only in the domestic market, but also in the overseas market. Foreigners should learn the culture of a country before winning over the local people. In turn, locals should show their hospitality to visitors in exchange for their trust. They share a view that acceptance of each other's cultural background is a necessary condition for cooperation. Understanding a culture has other implications. Differences in social background, cultural values and religious belief might make the discrepancy of foreigners and local inhabitants on some issues indelible; however, the higher interaction, the higher level of communication and understanding. Arabians, for example, used to consider westerners as their foes. Now they have concrete relations with their western allies in many fields. In the initial stage, their divergence seemed inherent but over time, with better mutual understanding, they take the same position on many issues. Undeniably, it is likely that in some resorts, foreign visitors repel the local community with their scant regard for the local environment and conventions when they first arrive. Although, it should be noted that most offences are accidental, rather than intentional. Instead, visitors disobey rules and conventions simply because they have no knowledge of them. This situation is expected to be improved with the passing of time when visitors from different countries increase their knowledge of a local culture. To conclude, according to the above analysis, we can observe that the increase in the international travel should not be taken as the cause of any conflict that arises between two countries. Alternatively, people should recognise their role in improving mutual understanding between two countries.
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Globalisation
is a catchall term that refers to any activity that involves more than one
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country
, to illustrate,
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travels
from one
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country
to another. The dramatic increase in transnational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
in recent years has sparked controversy over the potential impacts of this trend on individual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
,
especially
those new member states of
Possible spelling mistake. 'globalisation' is British English.
globalisation
.
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Some
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people
are concerned
that the upsurge in new arrivals will prompt
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local
hostility against
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visitors
,
rather
of promoting their
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understanding
on mutual cultural background. This notion should
be rejected
as one can
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see
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many
facts in
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favour
of this development between countries.

Firstly
, the main reason why international
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travels
would never bring conflict
is rooted
in the fact that both
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visitors
and
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locals
are
economically
motivated. International
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travel
opens up opportunities for business development throughout the world. Entrepreneurs
are interested
not
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only
in the domestic market,
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but
also
in the overseas market. Foreigners should learn the culture of a
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country
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before
winning over the
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local
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people
. In turn,
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locals
should
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show
their hospitality to
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visitors
in exchange for their trust. They share a view that acceptance of each other's cultural background is a necessary condition for cooperation.

Understanding a culture has other implications. Differences in social background, cultural values and religious belief might
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make
the discrepancy of foreigners and
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local
inhabitants on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issues indelible;
however
, the higher interaction, the higher level of communication and
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understanding
. Arabians,
for example
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to consider westerners as their foes.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
they have concrete relations with their western allies in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
fields. In the initial stage, their divergence seemed inherent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
over time, with better mutual
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understanding
, they take the same position on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
issues.

Undeniably
, it is likely that in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
resorts, foreign
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visitors
repel the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
community with their scant regard for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
environment and conventions when they
first
arrive. Although, it should
be noted
that most
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offences
are accidental,
rather
than intentional.
Instead
,
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visitors
disobey
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and conventions
simply
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because
they have no knowledge of them. This situation is
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expected
to be
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improved
with the passing of time when
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visitors
from
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different
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countries
increase their knowledge of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
culture.

To conclude
, according to the above analysis, we can observe that the increase in the international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
travel
should not
be taken
as the cause of any conflict that arises between two
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countries
.
Alternatively
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
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recognise
their role in improving mutual
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understanding
between two
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countries
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Writing task 1 (a letter)You are going on a short holiday soon and would like to invite a friend to join you. Write a letter to him/her and say– Explain why you need a holiday. – Explain why you want your friend to come. – Where and when do you want t v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
399 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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