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TPO 2 _ Independent TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v.1

TPO 2 _ Independent Task Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 1
The majority of the men and women spend a large part of their adult life at their office, job satisfaction is a crucial factor of individual wellbeing. For most of the peoples' money is the main factor of their satisfaction and it is quite unrealistic to have an expectation of a dream job in this competitive world. One of the main factors for most people is money. That is to say that they have to run their houses, they have some dependent on their shoulder whom they who to feed. They have to pay their bills as well. So, when a person has got enough money from their job they are quite satisfied with their job. For example, a recent report of the Asian Times concluded that 70% of houses in South Asia have only one breadwinner in their whole family, and the whole family is dependent on their salary to pay their bills and do other things. In this competitive world, it is quite unrealistic to have an expectation of a dream job. In other words, most of the graduate students think that they would be able to get their dream job just after their graduation. When they enter into real market, then they realize how difficult is to find a job that they have expected, especially in developing countries. For instance, a recent report suggested that only 10% of people who were fortunate enough to find the job they had expected during their graduation in India. In conclusion, the majority of the people get satisfied with their job if they are paid enough wages to pay their bills and are able to do purchase necessary things in their life and to get a dream job after graduation is quite unrealistic to think.
The majority of the
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men
and women spend a large part of their adult life at their office,
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job
satisfaction is a crucial factor of individual
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wellbeing
. For most of the peoples' money is the main factor of their satisfaction and it is
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quite
unrealistic to have an expectation of a
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dream
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job
in this competitive world.

One of the main factors for most
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people
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is
money.
That is
to say that they
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have to
run their
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houses
, they have
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some
dependent on their shoulder whom they who to feed. They
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have to
pay their bills
as well
.
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So, when
a person has
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got
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enough
money from their
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job
they are
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quite
satisfied with their
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job
.
For example
, a recent report of the Asian Times concluded that 70% of
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houses
in South Asia have
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only
one breadwinner in their whole family, and the whole family is dependent on their salary to pay their bills and do other things.

In this competitive world, it is
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quite
unrealistic to have an expectation of a
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dream
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job
.
In other words
, most of the graduate students
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think
that they would be able to
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get
their
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dream
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job
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just
after their graduation. When they enter into real market, then they realize how difficult is to find a
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job
that they have
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expected
,
especially
in
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developing countries
.
For instance
, a recent report suggested that
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only
10% of
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people
who were fortunate
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enough
to find the
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job
they had
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expected
during their graduation in India.

In conclusion
, the majority of the
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people
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get
satisfied with their
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job
if they
are paid
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enough
wages to pay their bills and are able to do
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purchase
necessary things in their life and to
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get
a
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dream
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job
after graduation is
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quite
unrealistic to
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think
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO 2 _ Independent Task Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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