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ur friend has just moved to a new house you want to send him a gift Write a letter to your friend In your letter you should tell what you will send to him as gift why you chose it as gift how you will send it to him v.1

ur friend has just moved to a new house you want to send him a gift Write a letter to your friend In your letter you should tell what you will send to him as gift why you chose it as gift how you will send it to him v. 1
It is considered by some that the responsibility to reduce the packaging on products lies with supermarkets and manufacturers that sell them, while there are others that think that this responsibility lies with consumers. In my opinion, I believe that this is a shared responsibility, as everyone plays a role in maintaining a sustainable environment. On the one hand, supermarkets and manufacturers should take the initiative and onus to encourage consumers to make greener choices. Supermarkets and manufacturers adopting sustainable packaging approach will pressure consumers to change their environmentally unsustainable habits. Supermarkets’ decision to ban single-use plastic bags or offering plastic bags for a charge has significantly reduced plastic bag consumption as it encourages consumer to bring their own recycle bag when shopping. For example, the ban on single-use plastic bags by Australia’s two biggest supermarkets, Coles and Woolworths has successfully prevented the introduction of approximately 1. 5 billion plastic bags into the environment. Hence, supermarkets and manufacturers play a key role in decreasing packaging on products. On the other hand, consumers have a vital role to play as manufacturers are catering to their needs. Consumers being environmentally aware when they make their purchase by choosing products that have been packaged in less wasteful ways could reduce packaging waste substantially. For example, consumers choosing not to purchase products with unnecessary packaging such as bottles packed inside boxes or fresh produced pack in additional plastics signal manufacturers that there is no demand for products that are overly packaged. This would then lead to a reduction in the production of excessive packaging on products. Finally, in my opinion, I believe that it takes effort from both supermarkets and manufacturers as well as consumer to effectively reduce the packaging on products. The actions taken by each party have direct and indirect influence on encouraging the reduction of packaging waste. This is because the demand from consumers will influence the products produced and offered by supermarkets and manufacturers, while the products offered by supermarkets and manufacturers will allow consumers to make greener choices. In conclusion, collective efforts from both sides are required to reduce excessive packaging waste.
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is considered
by
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some
that the responsibility to
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reduce
the
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packaging
on
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products
lies with supermarkets and
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manufacturers
that sell them, while there are others that
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think
that this responsibility lies with
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consumers
. In my opinion, I believe that this is a shared responsibility, as everyone plays a role in maintaining a sustainable environment.

On the one hand, supermarkets and
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manufacturers
should take the initiative and onus to encourage
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consumers
to
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make
greener choices. Supermarkets and
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manufacturers
adopting sustainable
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packaging
approach will pressure
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consumers
to
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change
their
environmentally
unsustainable habits. Supermarkets’ decision to ban single-
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use
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plastic
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bags
or offering
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plastic
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bags
for a charge has
significantly
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reduced
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plastic
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bag
consumption as it encourages
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consumer
to bring their
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own
recycle
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bag
when shopping.
For example
, the ban on single-
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use
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plastic
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bags
by Australia’s two biggest supermarkets,
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Coles
and
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Woolworths
has
successfully
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prevented
the introduction of approximately 1. 5 billion
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plastic
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bags
into the environment.
Hence
, supermarkets and
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manufacturers
play a key role in decreasing
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packaging
on products.

On the other hand
,
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consumers
have a vital role to play as
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manufacturers
are catering to their needs.
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Consumers
being
environmentally
aware when they
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make
their
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purchase
by choosing
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products
that have
been packaged
in less wasteful ways could
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reduce
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packaging
waste
substantially
.
For example
,
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consumers
choosing not to
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purchase
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products
with unnecessary
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packaging
such as bottles packed inside boxes or fresh produced pack in additional
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plastics
signal
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manufacturers
that there is no demand for
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products
that are
overly
packaged. This would then lead to a reduction in the production of excessive
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packaging
on products.

Finally
, in my opinion, I believe that it takes effort from both supermarkets and
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manufacturers
as well
as
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consumer
to
effectively
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reduce
the
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packaging
on
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products
. The actions taken by each party have direct and indirect influence on encouraging the reduction of
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packaging
waste. This is
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because
the demand from
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consumers
will influence the
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products
produced and offered by supermarkets and
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manufacturers
, while the
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products
offered by supermarkets and
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manufacturers
will
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allow
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consumers
to
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make
greener choices.
In conclusion
, collective efforts from both sides
are required
to
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reduce
excessive
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packaging
waste.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay ur friend has just moved to a new house you want to send him a gift Write a letter to your friend In your letter you should tell what you will send to him as gift why you chose it as gift how you will send it to him v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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