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You have recently moved to a different location. Write a letter to an english-speaking friend. In your letter-explain why you have moved-describe the new house-invite your friend to come and visit v.1

You have recently moved to a different location. Write a letter to an english-speaking friend. In your letter-explain why you have moved-describe the new house-invite your friend to come and visit v. 1
Along with the introduction of technology into our daily life, many activities that people used to do in the past are being altered. While many old fashioned individuals prefer to watch movies at the movie house, others choose to play their favourite films using the latest gadgets. No one can deny that attending movies at the cinema gives you the privilege to watch the latest releases. That is to say, the newest movies are displayed first and foremost on theatre screens before being made available to the majority of people in the comfort of their home. In addition to this, people not only get the chance to watch new movies, and even spend their time socialising with each other while watching. Perhaps many busy adults actually organise gatherings in the name of watching a picture in the cinema. However, the vast majority of youngsters are indulged in the technological advancement that we are currently living with. Perhaps the main reason for this is the comfort and convenience that this advancement has to offer. Furthermore, it is more convenient to watch movies on phones and tablets, because it could fit at any time during the busy schedule of most people. In addition, people can find a variety of movies to watch online instead of being restricted with fewer choices at the theatre. To conclude, I believe that it is always better to choose the most suitable way that fits your lifestyle. Whether you prefer to go to the theatre to watch a movie or prefer to just watch any picture in the comfort of your home, the most important aspect is to enjoy it to the maximum.
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many
activities that
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people
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used
to do in the past are
being altered
. While
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many
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old fashioned
individuals prefer to
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watch
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movies
at the
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movie
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house
, others choose to play their
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favourite
films using the latest gadgets.

No one can deny that attending
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movies
at the cinema gives you the privilege to
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watch
the latest releases.
That is
to say, the newest
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movies
are displayed
first
and foremost on
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theatre
screens
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before
being made
available to the majority of
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people
in the comfort of their home.
In addition
to this,
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people
not
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only
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get
the chance to
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watch
new
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movies
, and even spend their time
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socialising
with each other while watching. Perhaps
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many
busy adults actually
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organise
gatherings in the name of watching a picture in the cinema.

However
, the vast majority of youngsters
are indulged
in the technological advancement that we are
currently
living with. Perhaps the main reason for this is the comfort and convenience that this advancement
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has to
offer.
Furthermore
, it is more convenient to
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watch
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movies
on phones and tablets,
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because
it could fit at any time during the busy schedule of most
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people
.
In addition
,
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people
can find a variety of
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movies
to
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watch
online
instead
of
being restricted
with fewer choices at the
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theatre
.

To conclude
, I believe that it is always better to choose the most suitable way that fits your lifestyle. Whether you prefer to go to the
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theatre
to
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watch
a
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movie
or prefer to
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just
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watch
any picture in the comfort of your home, the most
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important
aspect is to enjoy it to the maximum.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have recently moved to a different location. Write a letter to an english-speaking friend. In your letter-explain why you have moved-describe the new house-invite your friend to come and visit v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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