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Writing TASK 1Write a letter to the local council. In your letterGive details of how you and your friends or famiy use the centre Explain why the sports and leisure center is important for the local community Describe the possible effects on local people v.2

Writing TASK 1Write a letter to the local council. In your letterGive details of how you and your friends or famiy use the centre Explain why the sports and leisure center is important for the local community Describe the possible effects on local people v. 2
Dear Sir, I am Bala living in 3rd street, Bangalore. The Easwar Sport center is located quite close to our home. I would like write this letter to insist that you keep the sports center open. I will explain in details about the effects of keeping this sports open. This sports center has been running for so long now I cant remember a time where my life was not associated with it. This is the place I met most of my friends in my locality. This place have more nostalgic memories of me playing football with my friends. Our gang was one of the first people to play football after it got refurbished as a grass courted ground. This will remain our home ground forever. The ground is the place of many mid age walkers and joggers in the morning and in the late evening. We never had our own park in the locality. But the track circling the football ground served the purpose well. If the center is closed then lot of people will have to do their morning walks/Jogs elsewhere. People might stop their healthy routines altogether incase this facility is closed down. This will effect the health and happyness index in the locality. So keeping all the sentiments, concerns and love that people hold dear for this sports center, I insist on behalf of my locality to not to close the sports center. Please consider the request and do the needful. Awaiting your response. Yours truly, Balaprasanth P
Dear Sir,

I am
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Bala
living in 3rd street, Bangalore. The
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Easwar
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Sport
center
is located
quite close to our home. I would like write this letter to insist that you
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keep
the
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sports
center open. I will
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explain
in
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details
about the effects of keeping this
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sports
open.

This
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sports
center has been running for
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so
long
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now
I
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cant
remember a
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time where
my life was not associated with it. This is the place I met most of my friends in my locality.
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This
place have more nostalgic memories of me playing football with my friends. Our gang was one of the
first
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people
to play football after it
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got
refurbished as a grass courted
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ground
. This will remain our home
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ground
forever.

The
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ground
is the place of
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many
mid age walkers and joggers in the morning and in the late evening. We never had our
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own
park in the locality.
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But
the
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track
circling the football
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ground
served the purpose well.

If the center
is closed
then lot of
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people
will
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have to
do their morning walks/Jogs elsewhere.
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People
might
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stop
their healthy routines altogether
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incase
this facility
is closed
down. This will
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effect
the health and
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happyness
index in the locality.

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So
keeping all the sentiments, concerns and
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love
that
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people
hold dear for this
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sports
center, I insist on behalf of my locality
One 'to' seems to be obsolete.
to not to
close the
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sports
center.
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Please
consider the request and do the needful. Awaiting your response.

Yours
truly
,

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Balaprasanth
P
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Writing TASK 1Write a letter to the local council. In your letterGive details of how you and your friends or famiy use the centre Explain why the sports and leisure center is important for the local community Describe the possible effects on local people v. 2

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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