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You have recently applied for a course at a college and have been accepted. However, you cannot join the course due to some reasons. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter: •which course you have been applied for•why you cannot j v.1

You have recently applied for a course at a college and have been accepted. However, you cannot join the course due to some reasons. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter: •which course you have been applied for•why you cannot j v. 1
A heated debate is whether the intended use or the exterior characteristic is highly-valued when constructing a building. In my opinion, I partly agree with the greater appreciation of function and come to the idea that people should take equal consideration in both factors which contribute to an appealing and convenient house. On the one hand, the great function is a crucial criterion to start erecting an architecture. First, there are a variety of different building types to serve specific purposes. For example, an office is a workplace for employees while a hospital is where patients go for a medical examination. Therefore, its functionality must be prioritized. Moreover, when architecture cannot meet the basic requirement of its owner, the exterior pattern is not worth considering. Holders may encounter a sense of disappointed, eventually upgrading and refurbishing one, later on, leading to a waste of finance in the future. On the other hand, the gorgeous outward look provides several benefits to both itself and its area. Indeed, a stunning design can partly boost a building’ s value remarkably. In particular, a shopping mall is considered much more luxury than a market due to the enchanting and professional appearance. As a result, people would choose such places as their destinations drawn to it to ask for services. Moreover, well- designed buildings beautify their surroundings; hence, reflecting the charm of the area on which they stand. Under some circumstances, an architecture even becomes one of the most different places on the map. Eiffel tower, for instance, has been a global cultural icon of France as well as the most-visited paid monument in the world. In conclusion, both aesthetic appearance and intended functions have their significance that supports the perfection of a building.
A heated debate is whether the intended
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
or the exterior characteristic is
highly
-valued when constructing a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
. In my opinion, I partly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the greater appreciation of function and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should take equal consideration in both factors which contribute to an appealing and convenient
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

On the one hand, the great function is a crucial criterion to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
erecting an architecture.
First
, there are a variety of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
types to serve specific purposes.
For example
, an office is a workplace for employees while a hospital is where patients go for a medical examination.
Therefore
, its functionality
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be prioritized
.
Moreover
, when architecture cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the basic requirement of its owner, the exterior pattern is not worth considering. Holders may encounter a sense of disappointed,
eventually
upgrading and refurbishing one, later on, leading to a waste of finance in the future.

On the other hand
, the gorgeous outward look provides several benefits to both itself and its area.
Indeed
, a stunning design can partly boost a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building’
s value
remarkably
.
In particular
, a shopping mall
is considered
much more luxury than a market due to the enchanting and professional appearance.
As a result
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
would choose such places as their destinations drawn to it to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
services.
Moreover
, well- designed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buildings
beautify their surroundings;
hence
, reflecting the charm of the area on which they stand. Under
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
circumstances, an architecture even becomes one of the most
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
places on the map.
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
Eiffel tower
,
for instance
, has been a global cultural icon of France
as well
as the most-visited paid monument in the world.

In conclusion
, both aesthetic appearance and intended functions have their significance that supports the perfection of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have recently applied for a course at a college and have been accepted. However, you cannot join the course due to some reasons. Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter: •which course you have been applied for•why you cannot j v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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