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You have participated in a party at your friend’s home last week. You may have forgotten your watch there. Write a letter to your friend and say– Thank him/her for the party. – Ask to look for the watch. – Suggest what he/she should do about it. v.1

You have participated in a party at your friend’s home last week. You may have forgotten your watch there. Write a letter to your friend and say– Thank him/her for the party. – Ask to look for the watch. – Suggest what he/she should do about it. v. 1
Happiness is an eminent aspect of life and each individual crave for it. There has been an ongoing debate on which phase of life is the happiest one. Some thinkers believe that the adolescent is the perfect period to enjoy the life at the fullest, while another set of people support that adulthood is apt for it. However, both have its pros and cons. This essay will discuss both the views before commenting on my opinion. Undoubtedly, senior people have ample of money to explore new and exciting things. However, they do not have sufficient time to enjoy their life with the family or dear ones because they are abiding to follow the norms of achieving success and handling their responsibilities. To illustrate this, professionals always plan to have a reunion with their college friends, however, only a few numbers of people turn up for it as they are busy in their life. As a result, although, people have money they do not have time to use it and experience the fun. Nevertheless, younger age groups have multifarious options to experience in their life. Moreover, their excitement level is at a higher peak as compared to older age groups. One of the main reasons is they make different friends, who motivate them to experiment various forms of activities for example Adventure, sports and many more. And this enjoyment can lead to various happy moments in life which are cherished at a later stage of life. To exemplify, recent surveys conducted by the Human Health Department, India, state that over a population of 1000K citizens around 80% accept that they enjoyed more in their teenage compared to their present life. To summarize, happiness can be measured in different ways using money, time, the interests of individuals. Even though juniors are short of cash, I believe this age group can have fun and experience happiness more compared to adults with responsibilities.
Happiness is an eminent aspect of
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life
and each individual crave for it. There has been an ongoing debate on which phase of
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life
is the happiest one.
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Some
thinkers believe that the adolescent is the perfect period to enjoy the
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life
at the fullest, while another set of
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people
support that adulthood is apt for it.
However
, both have its pros and cons. This essay will discuss both the views
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before
commenting on my opinion.

Undoubtedly
, senior
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people
have ample of money to explore new and exciting things.
However
, they do not have sufficient time to enjoy their
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life
with the family or dear ones
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because
they are abiding to follow the norms of achieving success and handling their responsibilities. To illustrate this, professionals always plan to have a reunion with their college friends,
however
,
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only
a few numbers of
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people
turn up for it as they are busy in their
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life
.
As a result
, although,
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people
have money they do not have time to
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use
it and experience the fun.

Nevertheless
, younger age groups have multifarious options to experience in their
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life
.
Moreover
, their excitement level is at a higher peak as compared to older age groups. One of the main reasons is they
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make
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different
friends, who motivate them to experiment various forms of activities
for example


Adventure, sports and
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many
more. And this enjoyment can lead to various happy moments in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
which
are cherished
at a later stage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. To exemplify, recent surveys conducted by the Human Health Department, India, state that over a population of 1000K citizens around 80% accept that they enjoyed more in their teenage compared to their present life.

To summarize
, happiness can
be measured
in
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different
ways using money, time, the interests of individuals.
Even though
juniors are short of cash, I believe this age group can have fun and experience happiness more compared to adults with responsibilities.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay You have participated in a party at your friend’s home last week. You may have forgotten your watch there. Write a letter to your friend and say– Thank him/her for the party. – Ask to look for the watch. – Suggest what he/she should do about it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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