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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job Write a letter to this friend. In your letter * Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college * Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her * suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her v.1

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job Write a letter to this friend. In your letter * Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college * Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her * suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her v. 1
Dear Joyce, How are you doing? I hope my letter meets you in good condition. I am writing in response to your letter regarding your decision to go to college or get an employment. I strongly suggest and urge you to consider getting a source of income. Going to a higher institution is not the best for you now because, considering the kind of things you love to go, you will not enjoy being in an academic setting at all. You will spend most of your time doing assignments, attending and spending hours in lecture rooms with a little or no chance for fun. If you, however secure a job, especially one in line with your areas of interest, you will find yourself spending time doing what you love. It will expose you to "on the job" learning. As such, you will find yourself getting better at what you do and also in the process, gather years of experience. In addition, it is one of the fastest ways of becoming a professional. I recommend you consider submitting applications at different media houses since you have always loved being on TV or facilitating a radio program. A good job as a presenter will be just fine for you. In conclusion, while going to the university has its own advantages and disadvantages, i advise you to think deeply about picking up an employment as it will provide you with a source of income whereby you can save up some money that could support you in the future if you decide to go to school after working for a while. Please accept my warmest regard as you decide. Yours Sincerely, Emiola
Dear Joyce,

How are you doing? I hope my letter meets you in
good
condition. I am writing in response to your letter regarding your decision to go to college or
get
an employment.

I
strongly
suggest and urge you to consider getting a source of income. Going to a higher institution is not the best for you
now
because
, considering the kind of things you
love
to go, you will not enjoy being in an academic setting at all. You will spend most of your time doing assignments, attending and spending hours in lecture rooms with a
little
or no chance for fun.

If you,
however
secure a job,
especially
one in line with your areas of interest, you will find yourself spending time doing what you
love
. It will expose you to
"
on the job
"
learning. As such, you will find yourself getting better at what you do and
also
in the process, gather years of experience.
In addition
, it is one of the fastest ways of becoming a professional.

I recommend you consider submitting applications at
different
media
houses
since you have always
loved
being on TV or facilitating a radio program. A
good
job as a presenter will be
just
fine for you.

In conclusion
, while going to the university has its
own
advantages and disadvantages,
i
advise you to
think
deeply
about picking up an employment as it will provide you with a source of income whereby you can save up
some
money that could support you in the future if you decide to go to school after working for a while.

Please
accept my warmest regard as you decide.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Emiola
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job Write a letter to this friend. In your letter * Say why he/she would not enjoy going to college * Explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her * suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her v. 1

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
277 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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