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you have notices that there are some maintenance and hygienic related issues with a public park near the house you have recently moved to. write a letter to your local council complaining about the condition of the park v.1

you have notices that there are some maintenance and hygienic related issues with a public park near the house you have recently moved to. write a letter to your local council complaining about the condition of the park v. 1
Communication has an important role in human existence. There is no doubt that the advancement of technology has transformed the people's communication. Although some people think that this development can have a detrimental impact on social life due to the reduced amount of time to meet their friends, it has many benefits such as easiness to contact the people. This essay disagrees the statement that the latest methods of interaction reduce the real time interactions between people. Looking back on the past, people communicate with friends via letter and phone. However, these two ways take a long time and are quite expensive for users. Being busy and far distance makes it hard for people to have a face to face meeting also. As a result, the relationships tend to be faded away over time. For instance, during the past generation only few people conduct get together between friends. This is due to the lack of accessibility between people. Even though every person has a postal address, it is extremely difficult to co-ordinate all people through the postal system. Nowadays, almost people use modern form of communication such as email and messaging, which is much more convenient owing to their benefits, Firstly, everyone can send an instant message to their friends everywhere with a very cheap price. Secondly, these modern forms are updated so that people can send out voice messages, pictures, Smilies, making the content of the conversation more interesting. For example, in my case, I have some foreign friends who I still keep contact with them through messengers. As a result, my social circle is bigger and I can broad my mind by chatting with others come from other countries. I think it is also difficult to argue that electronic email and messaging have reduced the amount of people see each other. In contrast, people are spending hours to hang out with their families and friends in the parties, events or entertainment areas. In conclusion, This essay disagree with the statement in the question and firmly believe that modern communications have greatly improved people's social lives.
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has an
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role in human existence. There is no doubt that the advancement of technology has transformed the
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people
's
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communication
. Although
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some
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people
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think
that this development can have a detrimental impact on social life due to the
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reduced
amount of
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time
to
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meet
their
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friends
, it has
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many
benefits such as easiness to contact the
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people
. This essay disagrees the statement that the latest methods of interaction
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reduce
the real
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time
interactions between
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people
.

Looking back on the past,
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people
communicate with
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friends
via letter and phone.
However
, these two ways take a long
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time
and are quite expensive for users. Being busy and far distance
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makes
it
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hard
for
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people
to have a face to face meeting
also
.
As a result
, the relationships tend to
be faded
away over
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time
.
For instance
, during the past generation
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only
few
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people
conduct
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get
together between
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friends
. This is due to the lack of accessibility between
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people
.
Even though
every person has a postal address, it is
extremely
difficult to co-ordinate all
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people
through the postal system.

Nowadays, almost
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people
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use
modern form of
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communication
such as email and messaging, which is much more convenient owing to their benefits,
Firstly
, everyone can
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send
an instant message to their
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friends
everywhere with a
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very
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cheap
price.
Secondly
, these modern forms
are updated
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so
that
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people
can
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send
out voice messages, pictures,
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Smilies
, making the content of the conversation more interesting.
For example
, in my case, I have
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some
foreign
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friends
who I
still
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keep
contact with them through messengers.
As a result
, my social circle is bigger and I
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can broad
my mind by chatting with others
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come
from other countries.

I
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think
it is
also
difficult to argue that electronic email and messaging have
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reduced
the amount of
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people
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see
each other.
In contrast
,
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people
are spending hours to hang out with their families and
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friends
in the parties,
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events
or entertainment areas.

In conclusion
,
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This essay disagree
with the statement in the question and
firmly
believe that modern communications have
greatly
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improved
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people
's social
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lives
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay you have notices that there are some maintenance and hygienic related issues with a public park near the house you have recently moved to. write a letter to your local council complaining about the condition of the park v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
347 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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