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All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.1

All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. v. 1
The rubbish is one of the major factors in increasing the pollution. However, after knowing their effects still you can find the rubbish everywhere in any part around the globe. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss why this is happening and what should be done to reduce it. One of the major factors in increasing of waste is overpopulation around the globe. The population of the world is growing at rapid pace resulting huge amount of waste being produced everywhere. For example, In third world countries, due to unawareness of the side effects of having many babies per family people still having so many babies per family resulting a huge amount of waste per capita in a country. Furthermore, A reduction in the waste can be achieved by controlling the over birth with the help of awareness programmes to be introduced by the Government. A Government should introduce several programmes to aware people about the demerits of over birth and especially a demerit regarding the production of a bulk of wastage. For instance, In first world countries, there are so many programmes introduced by the management of the country to stop people having too many babies resulting reduction in quantity of a waste material. As a conclusion, Top priority should be given to this cause to stop the increase in the amount of the rubbish around the globe which resulting many kinds of pollution. Either we are deeply concerned about this problem or not, Some countries will still produce more waste as compared to their present stage.
The rubbish is one of the major factors in increasing the pollution.
However
, after knowing their effects
still
you can find the rubbish everywhere in any part around the globe. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss why this is happening and what should
be done
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
it.

One of the major factors in increasing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
is overpopulation around the globe. The population of the world is growing at rapid pace
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resulting
huge amount of
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waste
being produced
everywhere.
For example
, In third world
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countries
, due to unawareness of the side effects of having
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
babies per family
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
still
having
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
babies per family
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resulting
a huge amount of
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waste
per capita in a country.

Furthermore
, A reduction in the
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waste
can
be achieved
by controlling the over birth with the
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help
of awareness
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programmes
to
be introduced
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should introduce several
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programmes
to aware
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
about the demerits of over birth and
especially
a demerit regarding the production of a bulk of wastage.
For instance
, In
first
world
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countries
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
introduced by the management of the
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country
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
having too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
babies
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
resulting
reduction in quantity of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
waste
material.

As a conclusion, Top priority should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to this cause to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
the increase in the amount of the rubbish around the globe which
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resulting
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many
kinds of pollution. Either we are
deeply
concerned about this problem or not,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
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countries
will
still
produce more
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waste
as compared to their present stage.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay All levels of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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