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Your local council have asked locals suggestions in how to keep the city cleaner. Write a letter to council. In the letter, you should: •explain what the council can do•what the people can do•tell how the community will benefit by keeping the city cle v.1

Your local council have asked locals suggestions in how to keep the city cleaner. Write a letter to council. In the letter, you should: •explain what the council can do•what the people can do•tell how the community will benefit by keeping the city cle v. 1
Many children struggle working their mathematics exercises or try to grasp some esoteric ideologies of philosophy every day. While I recognize that making Mathematics and Philosophy optional subjects may ease the school life of a number of students, I believe that those kind of subjects should be kept compulsory to a certain level. Mathematics and Philosophy had been never easy subjects at school. To be good at Maths, one needs to have great numerical skills while Philosophy would require learners to have a good analytical ability and deep social knowledge. Apparently not all children were born with such innate abilities. Furthermore, in a society of high specialization, some people do not need to know much about formulas or ideologies to be successful. A potential football player or an aspiring musician evidently do not need extensive knowledge of maths or philosophy. It would actually be a waste of talents if they are forced to divert their time into studying those subjects. Therefore, it is not necessary that everyone should follow the same structure of education with Maths and Philosophy at the core. However, I would argue that certain foundations of mathematics and philosophy are critical. Science subjects like mathematics and society play an important part in the intellectual development of a child. Beyond numbers, calculations or tenets, math enables children to think logically whereas philosophy cultivates in them a rightful mindset and guides them on how they perceive the world. All of them have enormous impacts on the children’s entire life. Besides, children are normally not mature enough to be able to make choices regarding their education. Thereby a compulsory set of subjects until a certain age, for example a fixed course for all primary schools, is reasonable. In conclusion, math and philosophy should not be completely optional at school, but preferably remain a compulsion to an extent.
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every day. While I recognize that making
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had been never easy
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analytical ability and deep social knowledge.
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. It would actually be a waste of talents if they
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.
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at the core.

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and society play an
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cultivates in them a rightful mindset and guides them on how they perceive the world. All of them have enormous impacts on the
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entire life.
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until a certain age,
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course for all primary
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, is reasonable.

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and
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should not be completely optional at
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,
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preferably
remain a compulsion to an extent.
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IELTS essay Your local council have asked locals suggestions in how to keep the city cleaner. Write a letter to council. In the letter, you should: •explain what the council can do•what the people can do•tell how the community will benefit by keeping the city cle v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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