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Write a letter to a friend inviting him her to watch a movie that he she wanted to see Tell him her What movie is it Why do you think it might be interesting Make arrangements to watch it together v.1

Write a letter to a friend inviting him her to watch a movie that he she wanted to see Tell him her What movie is it Why do you think it might be interesting Make arrangements to watch it together v. 1
An increasing number of people today are opting to start their own companies instead of working for a company mainly because of the increased support for young entrepreneurs. In my opinion, the main disadvantages of not having an employer are lack of expertise and its overall effect on businesses. The number of self-employed relates to young entrepreneurs and has its origin in widespread angel investment across a variety of industries. One well-known example of this can be seen on the popular show ‘Shark Tank, ’ where a panel of investors and executives hear product pitches and compete to purchase stakes in budding entrepreneurs’ businesses. This show has launched a number of successful products by securing initial funding, which has led to a trickle down effect from this show: not only has it turned specific dreams into realities, but it also encourages viewers in general to be more ambitious and has therefore been one of the main catalysts for the frenzy of self-run businesses popping up in recent years. Though there are undoubtedly positives to all these start-up companies, I think that the overall impact is negative because it results in many poorly run businesses. For example, in recent years a number of ride-sharing apps, including Uber, Grab, Lyft, Be, Go-Viet and countless others have sprung up. The established companies provide a functioning app with high-quality service to meet the growing demands of this industry. However, the majority of small startups find themselves in over their heads with apps that barely function and driver shortages that specialise in inconveniencing customers. It would be better for the people starting these derivative businesses to either work in companies, gain valuable experience, look for gaps in the market, and then develop develop worthy competitors or simply be content to have a good job in a good company that they do not own. In conclusion, I feel that the rising number of new companies has led to a cult of overconfidence. If more people were satisfied working for others rather than pursuing unrealisable ambitions, this would likely lead to better consumer products across the board as well as increased national economic prosperity.
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people
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today
are opting to
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start
their
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own
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companies
instead
of working for a
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company
mainly
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because
of the increased support for young entrepreneurs. In my opinion, the main disadvantages of not having an employer are lack of expertise and its
overall
effect on businesses.

The
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number
of self-employed relates to young entrepreneurs and has its origin in widespread angel investment across a variety of industries. One well-known example of this can be
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seen
on the popular
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show
‘Shark Tank,
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’
where a panel of investors and executives hear product pitches and compete to
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purchase
stakes in budding entrepreneurs’
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businesses
. This
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show
has launched a
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number
of successful products by securing initial funding, which has led to a trickle down effect from this
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show
: not
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only
has it turned specific dreams into realities,
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but
it
also
encourages viewers
in general
to be more ambitious and has
therefore
been one of the main catalysts for the frenzy of self-run
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businesses
popping up in recent years.

Though there are
undoubtedly
positives to all these
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start
-up
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companies
, I
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think
that the
overall
impact is
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negative
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because
it results in
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many
poorly
run
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businesses
.
For example
, in recent years a
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number
of ride-sharing apps, including Uber, Grab, Lyft, Be,
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Go-Viet
and countless others have sprung up. The established
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companies
provide a functioning app with high-quality service to
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meet
the growing demands of this industry.
However
, the majority of
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small
startups find themselves in over their heads with apps that
barely
function and driver shortages that
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specialise
in inconveniencing customers. It would be better for the
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people
starting these derivative
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businesses
to either work in
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companies
, gain valuable experience, look for gaps in the market, and then
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develop develop
worthy competitors or
simply
be content to have a
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good
job in a
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good
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company
that they do not
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own
.

In conclusion
, I feel that the rising
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number
of new
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companies
has led to a cult of overconfidence. If more
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people
were satisfied
working for others
rather
than pursuing
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unrealisable
ambitions, this would likely lead to better consumer products across the board
as well
as increased national economic prosperity.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Write a letter to a friend inviting him her to watch a movie that he she wanted to see Tell him her What movie is it Why do you think it might be interesting Make arrangements to watch it together v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
357 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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