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you have long been friends with someone, if they do something that you don't like, should you still be friend with him or her? v.2

you have long been friends with someone, if they do something that you don't like, should you still be friend with him or her? v. 2
People in their life have different possessions but one of the precious assets that they have is their friend. We make a lot of mistakes in the life and some of them affect other people. Some people believe that a friend should be vigilant all the time to do always for their friend' s favor and if he did something you do not like you should unravel your friendship tie. I disagree with these idea and I believe we cannot cut friendship in any small challenge. I feel this way because of two main reasons that I am going to explore in the following essay. first and foremost, we cannot ruin our history with someone because of a mistake. As a matter of fact, friendship is built over a long period of time and diminishing your bond with like-minded friends means that you do not have charechtrestics of generocity. If you consider him as a friend and forgive him, it would consolidate your friendship tie. As a personal example. one of my best friends named Ahmed who I have known him since I was ten years old, divulged my secret to my girlfriend. I felt embarrassed and angry at the same time. However, after talking with him and understading that he felt guilty, I forgave him. After that we are closer to each other. Secondly, it is hard to sustitute a friend with new person. friends are people' s social investment. Admittedly, a considerable amount of time are allocated to grasp whether some one is reliable or not. Removing an indivisual from our life means that we should make a new investment to find a new reliable person that has same interest. suppose that you are a manager of football team and during a game, one of your favourite player makes a mistake and takes a red card from refree. As a manager you are in a dilemma. whether you should fire him and find a new player in his position or not. Buying a new player means allocating club' s budget for a replacement. I think host of the people give another chance to the player. the player and the friend that makes a mistake are the same. we can give a new chance to him In a nutshell, I adamantly believe that people should not cut their friendship with merely one mistake.
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possessions
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friend
. We
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in the life and
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of them affect other
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people
believe that a
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should be vigilant all the
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friendship
tie. I disagree with these
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and I believe we cannot
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friendship
in any
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of two main reasons that I am going to explore in the following essay.

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first
and foremost, we cannot ruin our history with someone
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of a
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mistake
. As a matter of fact,
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friendship
is built
over a long period of
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time
and diminishing your bond with like-minded
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friends
means that you do not have
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charechtrestics
of
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generocity
. If you consider him as a
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and forgive him, it would consolidate your
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tie. As a personal example.
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one
of my best
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friends
named Ahmed who I have known him since I was ten years
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, divulged my secret to my girlfriend. I felt embarrassed and angry at the same
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time
.
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, after talking with him and
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understading
that he felt guilty, I forgave him.
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that we are closer to each other.

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, it is
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person.
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are
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people&
#039; s social investment.
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, a considerable amount of
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are allocated
to grasp whether
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some one
is reliable or not. Removing an
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indivisual
from our life means that we should
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a
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investment to find a
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reliable person that has same
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suppose
that you are a manager of football team and during a game, one of your
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favourite
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player
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a
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and takes a red card from
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refree
.
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whether
you should fire him and find a
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in his position or not. Buying a
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player
means allocating
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club&
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host of the
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people
give another chance to the
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player
.
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the
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player
and the
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that
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makes
a
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are the same.
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we
can give a
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new
chance to
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him


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adamantly
believe that
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should not
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friendship
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4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Mistakes

IELTS essay you have long been friends with someone, if they do something that you don't like, should you still be friend with him or her? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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