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Do you agree or disagree? People meet many problems in their daily life and they can solve them by themselves or with the help of their families, so the help from the government is not necessary v.181

People meet many problems in their daily life and they can solve them by themselves or with the help of their families, so the help from the government is not necessary v. 181
There is no shortage of debate whether the government should interfere in solving problems of people' s daily life or not. I firmly believe that people cannot solve all their problems by their own or their family and assist of government is vital. I feel this way because of two main reasons that I am going to describe as follow. First and foremost, people cannot solve all their problems themselves. Some conflictions during daily life are big enough that a specific person cannot solve it even by recommendations of others. To assist people in these situations, there should be a third party that has a power to solve it. As an example, if we were in an economic recession in the country, some sort of products would be scarce. Therefore, finding a good like rice can be utterly difficult. Accordingly, have other people' s support wouldn’t make rice available. Therefore, considerations of governments can remove the barriers to finding the product in this kind of situation. On the other hand, some problems in the daily life are against the law. People cannot solve them on their own. Constitutional interference is required to stop people to have violent reactions against each other. Secondly, people follow their advantages and solving their problems can have significant effects on others in the community. Humankind tends to maximize his utility. As a result, this maximization wouldn’t achieve unless by minimizing the utility of the other people in the society. As a matter of fact, to inhibit this kind of activities interference of the governments are necessary since the state can inhibit these kinds of activities and suggest another solution to the involved people. In a nutshell, I believe that government should help people to find a solution for some sorts of the problems. This is because some conflictions in the life are big enough that finding a solution for it is impossible for a particular person and people' s solution can have a tremendous influence on others.
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cannot
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solve
all their
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problems
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own
or their family and assist of
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because
of two main reasons that I am going to
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as follow
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and foremost,
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people
cannot
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all their
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problems
themselves.
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Some
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conflictions
during daily
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life
are
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big
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enough
that a specific person cannot
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solve
it even by recommendations of others. To assist
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people
in these situations, there should be a third party that has a power to
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solve
it. As an example, if we were in an economic recession in the country,
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some
sort of products would be scarce.
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, finding a
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good
like rice can be
utterly
difficult.
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people&
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make
rice available.
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, considerations of
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governments
can remove the barriers to finding the product in this kind of situation. On the
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other
hand,
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some
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problems
in the daily
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life
are against the law.
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People
cannot
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solve
them on their
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own
. Constitutional interference
is required
to
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stop
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people
to have violent reactions against each other.

Secondly
,
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people
follow their advantages and solving their
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problems
can have significant effects on others in the community. Humankind tends to maximize his utility.
As a result
, this maximization wouldn’t achieve unless by minimizing the utility of the
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other
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people
in the society. As a matter of fact, to inhibit this kind of activities interference of the
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governments
are necessary since the state can inhibit these kinds of activities and suggest another
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solution
to the involved
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people
.

In a nutshell, I believe that
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government
should
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help
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people
to find a
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solution
for
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some
sorts of the
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problems
. This is
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because
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some
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conflictions
in the
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life
are
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big
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enough
that finding a
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solution
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people&
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can have a tremendous influence on others.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay People meet many problems in their daily life and they can solve them by themselves or with the help of their families, so the help from the government is not necessary v. 181

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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