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You have long been friends with someone. If they dosomething that you don’t like, should you still be friendswith him or her? v.3

You have long been friends with someone. If they dosomething that you don’t like, should you still be friendswith him or her? v. 3
Since the beginning of time, human beings strive to communicate with each other. Throughout history, friendship has a prominent role in people’s personal life. In essence, man needs to communicate and the best of relationship is being with someone who is special. Thus, friendship has a very important impact on human life. I believe that a long friendship is valuable, so I agree with the above sentences which means we should befriend with her/him I will explicate my point of view in 2 following paragraphs. First and foremost, the most important prerequisite for adultsent is trying to solve the problems not running away from them. Friendship problems are permanent and it will be solved just with relaxation and forgiveness. Every relationship needs both. As a personal experience, when I was in middle school I had a fight with one of the best friends of mine, in that time we broke up our friendship and didn’t talk to each other for two years. Now I regretted and realized we could be adults and just talked to each other and solved the problems. The second reason that I would like to bring here that all friend have things in common and opposite things and these differences made all friendships beautiful. but a sudden change in ethics is bad behavior. If a friend of mine, suddenly but for a long time doing something that I don’t like. In the first step, I have to be honest and ask myself which is not this my fault or mistaken or my impatience? In the second step, if it was her/him problems I will talk with her and I will try to eliminate the problem. In the third step, if there wasn’t any other way and if I wouldn’t be happy anymore and this friendship became my life problem, I will end it up. To wrap it up, I believe friendship is very valuable and need patient and sacrificed but also need happiness and joy. So if we have problems in our relationship we have to try so hard to fix it and throwing it must definitely be the last thing.
Since the beginning of time, human beings strive to communicate with each other.

Throughout history,
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friendship
has a prominent role in
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people
’s personal life.

In essence,
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man
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needs
to communicate and the best of relationship is being with someone who is special.
Thus
,
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friendship
has a
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very
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important
impact on human life.

I believe that a long
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friendship
is valuable,
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so
I
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agree
with the above sentences which means we should befriend with her/him

I will explicate my point of view in 2 following paragraphs.

First
and foremost, the most
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important
prerequisite for
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adultsent
is trying to solve the
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problems
not running away from them.

Friendship
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problems
are permanent and it will
be solved
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just
with relaxation and forgiveness. Every relationship
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needs
both.

As a personal experience, when I was in middle school I had a fight with one of the best friends of mine, in that time we broke up our
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friendship
and didn’t talk to each other for two years.

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Now
I regretted and realized we could be adults and
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just
talked to each other and solved the problems.

The second reason that I would like to bring here that all friend have things in common and opposite things and these differences made all
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friendships
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beautiful
.
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but
a sudden
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change
in ethics is
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bad
behavior.

If a friend of mine,
suddenly
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but
for a long time doing something that I don’t like.

In the
first
step, I
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have to
be honest and ask myself which is not this my fault or mistaken or my impatience?

In the second step, if it was her/him
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problems
I will talk with her and I will try to eliminate the problem.

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In
the third step, if there wasn’t any other way and if I wouldn’t be happy anymore and this
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friendship
became my life
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problem
, I will
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end
it up.

To wrap it up, I believe
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friendship
is
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very
valuable and
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need
patient and sacrificed
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but
also
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need
happiness and joy.

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So
if we have
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problems
in our relationship we
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have to
try
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so
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hard
to
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fix
it and throwing it
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must
definitely be the last thing.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay You have long been friends with someone. If they dosomething that you don’t like, should you still be friendswith him or her? v. 3

Essay
  American English
16 paragraphs
355 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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