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You have long been friends with someone. If they dosomething that you don’t like, should you still be friendswith him or her? v.1

You have long been friends with someone. If they dosomething that you don’t like, should you still be friendswith him or her? v. 1
The masses believe regional areas should not be disturbed for development, while others think there is no vacant land in urban areas for human settlement. In my opinion, rural areas should also be exposed to development and this essay will provide a detailed explanation on the benefits of development in outskirt. In order to improve economic growth of a nation all of its regions need to be well equipped with basic amenities. In addition, this can only be achieved when people start living there and pay taxes in that region. For instance, Perth in Australia is a developed city as well as it has a vast landscape. In summary, every time development does not come at the cost of disturbing flora and fauna. If the government has strict environmental laws, we can achieve development as well as protect the beauty of regional areas. Moreover, when rural areas are not exposed to development, people in these locations would never be able to compete against the generations of urban population. This population will never get the glittery boulevard similar to downtown. To illustrate, young children in these areas would miss meals with friends at McDonalds and teenagers would never get a taste of nightlife. As a result, everybody has a right to stay close to their families as well as enjoy urbanisation in their own town. To conclude, development should be in rural areas only after considering all environmental laws. In short, every living creature has right on Earth landscape not only humans. So, we should not occupy every bit of vacant land
The masses believe regional
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areas
should not
be disturbed
for
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development
, while others
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think
there is no vacant land in urban
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areas
for human settlement. In my opinion, rural
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areas
should
also
be exposed
to
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development
and this essay will provide a detailed explanation on the benefits of
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development
in outskirt.

In order to
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improve
economic growth of a nation all of its regions need to be
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well equipped
with basic amenities.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
addition, this can
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only
be achieved
when
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people
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start
living there and pay taxes in that region.
For instance
, Perth in Australia is a developed city as
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well
as it has a vast landscape. In summary, every time
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development
does not
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come
at the cost of disturbing flora and fauna. If the
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government
has strict environmental laws, we can achieve
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development
as
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well
as protect the beauty of regional areas.

Moreover
, when rural
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areas
are not exposed to
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development
,
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people
in these locations would never be able to compete against the generations of urban population. This population will never
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get
the glittery boulevard similar to downtown. To illustrate, young children in these
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areas
would miss meals with friends at
Did you mean the fast food chain "McDonald's" (always spelled with a possessive apostrophe)?
McDonalds
and
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teenagers
would never
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get
a taste of nightlife.
As a result
, everybody has a right to stay close to their families as
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well
as enjoy
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urbanisation
in their
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own
town.

To conclude
,
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development
should be in rural
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areas
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only
after considering all environmental laws. In short, every living creature has right on Earth landscape not
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only
humans.
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So
, we should not occupy every bit of vacant land
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have long been friends with someone. If they dosomething that you don’t like, should you still be friendswith him or her? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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