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You have long been friend with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with him or her？ v.2

You have long been friend with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with him or her？ v. 2
Friendship is a catch-all term that refers to any reciprocal relations among people. In this respect, some relations are deeper, and individuals take advantage of not only mentally but also emotionally. There have been times that these relations might be suffered from turmoil. In these conditions, people need to be careful about their behavior so as not to annihilate their association. I lend credence to my view in the following paragraphs. First and foremost, intimate friends should not put an end to their prolonged connection for scant matters. In fact, due to the living in the hustle and bustle of metropolitan cities, many people have been suffering from stress-induced diseases, leading them to have chaotic, anarchic behavior. Undoubtedly, people would misbehave to their friends as an outlet of stress sporadically, albeit unwillingly. This would not be the enduring condition, and their behaviors turn to get better by the passage of time. In this regard, friends should be patient and carry out manifold avenues to alleviate their mental and emotional disorders; the presence of which will contribute greatly to weaken their concrete relations. It worth bearing in mind that noting is not gratifying more than forgiveness. By the meantime, these intimate, old friends can receive sympathy and goodwill from each other. What is more, individuals are supposed to behave in a way based on unspoken friendly rules. That is to say, intimate friends show their hospitality in exchange for trust. Correspondingly, sometime friends would tell a lie or at least twist the fact to keep their concrete reciprocal associations; notwithstanding, the misleading impressions would be aroused. An example can drive this notion home. I am reminded of the days I was twenty, I was suffered from unknown, excruciating diseases. My intimate friend, Sara, was the only person contacting my doctor. Whenever I asked her about my general well-being, she diverted my thought to another subject. Having considered my condition, she decided to conceal the truth. At first, this behavior made me irritating, but she never described my disease. I could feel better after a year, and when I realized about my hard-to-cure disease, I got astonished about how to tackle with. Had I known about my problem, I would not be able to get improved on the assumption that I did not have positive, energetic morale to cope with illness. In fact, she was such a panacea for me. In the final analyzing, I have to reiterate my standpoint that people should keep their old, intimate friendship. This is because some mistakes would happen unwittingly, and sometimes individuals should not be honest with their friends so as to help them tackle a problem.
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. In this respect,
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relations
are deeper, and individuals take advantage of not
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also
emotionally
. There have been times that these
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relations
might
be suffered
from turmoil. In these conditions,
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people
need to be careful about their
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behavior
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so
as not to annihilate their association. I lend credence to my view in the following paragraphs.

First
and foremost,
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intimate
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friends
should not put an
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end
to their prolonged connection for scant matters. In fact, due to the living in the hustle and bustle of metropolitan cities,
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many
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people
have been suffering from
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stress
-induced
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diseases
, leading them to have chaotic, anarchic
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behavior
.
Undoubtedly
,
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people
would misbehave to their
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friends
as an outlet of
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stress
sporadically
, albeit
unwillingly
. This would not be the enduring condition, and their
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behaviors
turn to
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get
better by the passage of time. In this regard,
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friends
should be patient and carry out manifold avenues to alleviate their mental and emotional disorders; the presence of which will contribute
greatly
to weaken their concrete
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relations
.
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It
worth bearing in mind that noting is not gratifying more than forgiveness. By the meantime, these
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intimate
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
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friends
can receive sympathy and goodwill from each other.

What is more
, individuals
are supposed
to behave in a way based on unspoken friendly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
.
That is
to say,
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intimate
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friends
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
their hospitality in exchange for trust.
Correspondingly
, sometime
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friends
would
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tell
a lie or at least twist the fact to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
their concrete reciprocal associations; notwithstanding, the misleading impressions would
be aroused
. An example can drive this notion home. I
am reminded
of the days I was twenty, I
was suffered
from unknown, excruciating
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diseases
. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
intimate
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friend
, Sara, was the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
person contacting my doctor. Whenever I asked her about my general well-being, she diverted my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
to another subject. Having considered my condition, she decided to conceal the truth. At
first
, this
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behavior
made me irritating,
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but
she never
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described
my
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disease
. I could feel better after a year, and when I realized about my
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hard
-to-cure
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disease
, I
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got
astonished about how to tackle with. Had I known about my problem, I would not be able to
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get
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improved
on the assumption that I did not have
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positive
, energetic morale to cope with illness. In fact, she was such a panacea for me.

In the final analyzing, I
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have to
reiterate my standpoint that
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people
should
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keep
their
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old
,
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intimate
friendship. This is
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because
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some
mistakes would happen
unwittingly
, and
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sometimes
individuals should not be honest with their
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friends
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
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help
them tackle a problem.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay You have long been friend with someone. If they do something that you don’t like, should you still be friends with him or her？ v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
442 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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