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With the increased global demand for oil and gas undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources To what extent do you agree v.3

With the increased global demand for oil and gas undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources 3
The consumption of fuel has witnessed an exponential rise due to an ever-increasing population and an increase in industrial productions. This thirst to get more fuel to satisfy the demand has led some people to argue that the search for fuel should now extend to the undiscovered territories. I strongly disapprove of this idea and this essay will first discuss the drawbacks of such actions, secondly the alternative ways to meet the demand; followed by a reasoned conclusion. To begin with, the greed of humans to exploit nature to meet their requirements is not new. We have successfully destroyed the flora and fauna of most accessible parts of the world and now an urge to venture into areas that remained untouched is pernicious. The human’s activity to maraud the nature will not only disturb the tranquillity of these places but will also endanger its inhabitants. For instance, there has been a growing clamour, for oil and gas companies to discover natural reserves in Alaska and Greenland. These remote parts of the world are already fighting the adverse effects of global warming and now the human landing for oil will only make the situation grow grim whose adverse effects will be felt throughout the world. However, one cannot allow the reduction in the supply of oil and gas to derail the economies. Dealing with this requires governments to invest more in alternative sources of energy. Moreover, the supply of fossil fuel is limited and would not last a century. This lingering threat to the end of fuel supply has already triggered the search for alternative sources of energy. Consequently, many developed countries are already switching to biodegradable fuels. The need of the hour is to preserve nature while developing ways to replace the use of fossil fuel with clean sources of energy. To conclude, the exploitation of nature for human greed should stop. The landing of humans in these secluded areas would threaten the biodiversity of these places and would only deteriorate the ecological balance further. The time is ripe to search for alternatives for fuels before the last drop ends.
The consumption of
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fuel
has witnessed an exponential rise due to an ever-increasing population and an increase in industrial productions. This thirst to
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get
more
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fuel
to satisfy the demand has led
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some
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people
to argue that the search for
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fuel
should
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now
extend to the undiscovered territories. I
strongly
disapprove of this
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idea
and this essay will
first
discuss the drawbacks of such actions,
secondly
the
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alternative
ways to
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meet
the demand; followed by a reasoned conclusion.

To
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begin
with, the greed of
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humans
to exploit
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nature
to
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meet
their requirements is not new. We have
successfully
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destroyed
the flora and fauna of most accessible parts of the world and
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now
an urge to venture into areas that remained untouched is pernicious. The
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human’s
activity to maraud the
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nature
will not
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only
disturb the
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tranquillity
of these places
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but
will
also
endanger its inhabitants.
For instance
, there has been a growing
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clamour
, for oil and gas
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companies
to discover natural reserves in Alaska and Greenland. These remote parts of the world are already fighting the adverse effects of global warming and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
the
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human
landing for oil will
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only
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make
the situation grow grim whose adverse effects will
be felt
throughout the world.

However
, one cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the reduction in the supply of oil and gas to derail the economies. Dealing with this requires
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
to invest more in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternative
sources of energy.
Moreover
, the supply of fossil
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fuel
is limited
and would not last a century. This lingering threat to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of
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fuel
supply has already triggered the search for
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alternative
sources of energy.
Consequently
,
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many
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developed countries
are already switching to biodegradable
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fuels
. The need of the hour is to preserve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
while developing ways to replace the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
with clean sources of energy.

To conclude
, the exploitation of
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nature
for
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human
greed should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
. The landing of
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humans
in these secluded areas would threaten the biodiversity of these places and would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
deteriorate the ecological balance
further
. The time is ripe to search for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
alternatives
for
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fuels
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the last drop ends.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay With the increased global demand for oil and gas undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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