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You have a bicycle that you are no longer using. You would like to sell it to a friend. write a letter to your friend. In your letterexplain why you are no longer using your bicycle. describe your bicycle. explain why you think your friend would like to have v.1

You have a bicycle that you are no longer using. You would like to sell it to a friend. write a letter to your friend. In your letterexplain why you are no longer using your bicycle. describe your bicycle. explain why you think your friend would like to have v. 1
In a little over a decade, the meaning of parenting for many people has changed the world over. Many believe that parents should keep an eye on their children’s activities, others believe that parents should set them free. In my opinion, parents should monitor, and the reasons will be outlined in this essay. Firstly, it is believed that children should be provided with the sense of freedom. This is an essential part to outgrow into responsible adults. For instance, if parents give their children the liberty, not only they will think independently, but they will also perform their daily tasks without any aid. In addition, giving teenagers freedom will also help them to take care of their personal sense of wellbeing and live their life true to their own beliefs. For example, a recent psychology study proves that young ones who have experienced freedom in their life can easily express themselves well than others. Secondly, I side with the view that parents should look after their kids. Primarily, parents should be involved in the day to day activities of their young ones, as growing up is one of the crucial role to inculcate the family values and traditions. To illustrate, adolescents need love and affection and supervising them will enable them to develop such qualities and avoiding them to fall in a bad company. Moreover, parents should also spend time with their children and encourage to pursue their interest to develop an intimate bond. This will help the children to be socially active and can explore better opportunities in life. In conclusion, although it is undeniable that providing freedom helps children to be independent and more responsible, however if supervised, in addition, they will also inculcate the moral values and can be stopped from going in the wrong directions.
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in this essay.

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children
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teenagers
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, as growing up is one of the crucial role to inculcate the family values and traditions. To illustrate, adolescents need
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love
and affection and supervising them will enable them to develop such qualities and avoiding them to fall in a
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.
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children
and encourage to pursue their interest to develop an intimate bond. This will
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help
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children
to be
socially
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In conclusion
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freedom
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helps
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children
to be independent and more responsible,
however
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If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay You have a bicycle that you are no longer using. You would like to sell it to a friend. write a letter to your friend. In your letterexplain why you are no longer using your bicycle. describe your bicycle. explain why you think your friend would like to have v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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