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Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to peopleDiscuss both advantages and disadvantages v.4

Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people 4
The advent of social media has created quite a buzz in our civilization. It would not be an overstatement if our current and previous centuries could be divided into two parts, as pre-social media Era and post-social media Era. While a section of the modern society enjoys and appreciates its advantages, the rest of the world has contrasting views on the same. I am an advocate of the former view and I will present my views on both sides of the topic. It is true that anything in excess is bad and this statement stands true for social media. Excessive and meaningless usage of social media can drastically reduce our productivity, social interactions, mental health etc. , . According to the study conducted by Harvard university, people who spend more time on social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, snapchat etc. , . Tend to become unhappy and depressed. Several studies have shown that social media has brought about some detrimental effects to their normal social interactions with colleagues, friends and family. It is quite imperative that social media presents us with some disadvantages which could not be ignored. On the other hand, I reckon that Social media if put to meaningful use, presents us with numerous advantages. Most primarily, It has enabled us to connect with friends and family who live in different cities or countries. . According to the survey conducted by Indian express, Non-resident Indians now feel more connected with their friends and family as they are able to communicate with them through video calls, voice calls etc. , . This is indeed a positive change. Secondly, social media have presented an advertising platform for many entrepreneurs who can now reach their prospective customers at no cost. The traditional advertising methods are either expensive or do not target the right customer population. This has certainly given a great boost to budding entrepreneurs and small businesses. According to the survey conducted by the economic times, social media has made it easier for many businesses to find the right customer population. These perks presented by the social media to the modern society could only be dreamt of a century ago. In a nutshell, social media like any other technology if used wisely can create wonders for the modern world. It is undoubtedly a double edged sword and there are both advantages and disadvantages associated. I reckon that though it presents some disadvantages, they certainly do not overweigh the advantages. I strongly believe that in the very near future, with proper awareness and outreach, social media will certainly replace all other means of communication which indeed will be a positive development for the modern society.
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social
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has created quite a buzz in our civilization. It would not be an overstatement if our
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pre-social
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media
Era and post-social
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Era. While a section of the
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modern
society enjoys and appreciates its
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advantages
, the rest of the world has contrasting views on the same. I am an advocate of the former view and I will
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present
my views on both sides of the topic.

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bad
and this statement stands true for
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social
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media
. Excessive and meaningless usage of
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social
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media
can
drastically
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reduce
our productivity,
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interactions, mental health etc.
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Harvard university
,
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people
who spend more time on
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social
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platforms like Facebook, Instagram,
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snapchat
etc.
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, .
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has brought about
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some
detrimental effects to their normal
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interactions with colleagues, friends and family. It is quite imperative that
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social
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media
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presents
us with
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some
disadvantages which could not be
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ignored
.

On the other hand
, I reckon that
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Social
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if put to meaningful
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use
,
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presents
us with numerous
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advantages
. Most
primarily
, It has enabled us to connect with friends and family who
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live
in
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different
cities or countries.
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now
feel more connected with their friends and family as they are able to communicate with them through video calls, voice calls etc.
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indeed
a
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positive
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Secondly
,
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have presented an advertising platform for
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many
entrepreneurs who can
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now
reach their prospective customers at no cost. The traditional advertising methods are either expensive or do not target the right customer population. This has
certainly
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given
a great boost to budding entrepreneurs and
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small
businesses. According to the survey conducted by the economic times,
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social
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media
has made it easier for
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many
businesses to find the right customer population. These perks presented by the
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social
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media
to the
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modern
society could
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only
be dreamt
of a century ago.

In a nutshell,
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like any other technology if
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used
wisely
can create wonders for the
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modern
world. It is
undoubtedly
a
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double edged
sword and there are both
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advantages
and disadvantages associated. I reckon that though it
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presents
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some
disadvantages, they
certainly
do not
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overweigh
the
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. I
strongly
believe that in the
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very
near future, with proper awareness and outreach,
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social
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will
certainly
replace all other means of communication which
indeed
will be a
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positive
development for the
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modern
society.
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IELTS essay Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
444 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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