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Fossil fuels such as coal，oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. Recently, in some countries, the use of alternative energy including wind and solar power has been encouraged，Is this trend a postive or a negative development? v.1

Fossil fuels such as coal，oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. Recently, in some countries, the use of alternative energy including wind and solar power has been encouraged，Is this trend a postive or a negative development? v. 1
In the modern world, due to overpopulation the forests are being destroyed. Our actions are responsible for the global extinction of the animals all over the world. The forests are being cleared everyday which is the homes of lots of animals. This essay will discuss the main reasons of animal's extinction and the steps which we can perform to stop it. One of the main reasons of animal extinction is deforestation. Due to the increase in public demands, trees are being chopped down, hectares of the area is being cleared to make factories, residences. We are destroying the homes of many wild animals to build our houses. Apart from that, the daily use plastic is killing the animals on a global level. For example, In a recent survey conducted by the marine biologists, it was found that plastic has wiped out more than 10 species of sea turtles from the Earth. The government should spread awareness and ban single use plastic, then only we can protect the planet from global extinction. Another reason for this is the money, in the eagerness of earning more and more money, people sell animal skins, horns etc. They hunt animals so that they can sell their body parts and make good amount of money. For instance, even though the hunting of Rhinoceros is banned in India, many people still kill them and sell their horns. They should be protected from the hunters and there should be proper conservation parks where they can live. In conclusion, there are many factors which lead the animals to the verge of extinction. It should be our duty to protect them and take proper measures to save the environment. They have the same right of the Earth as the humans do.
In the modern world, due to overpopulation the forests are being
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destroyed
. Our actions are responsible for the global
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extinction
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
all over the world. The forests are
being cleared
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
which is the homes of lots of
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animals
. This essay will discuss the main reasons of animal's
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extinction
and the steps which we can perform to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
it.

One of the main reasons of
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animal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extinction
is deforestation. Due to the increase in public demands, trees are
being chopped
down, hectares of the area is
being cleared
to
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make
factories, residences. We are destroying the homes of
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many
wild
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animals
to build our
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houses
. Apart from that, the daily
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use
plastic is killing the
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animals
on a global level.
For example
, In a recent survey conducted by the marine biologists, it
was found
that plastic has wiped out more than 10 species of sea turtles from the Earth. The
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government
should spread awareness and ban single
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use
plastic, then
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only
we can protect the planet from global extinction.

Another reason for this is the money, in the eagerness of earning more and more money,
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people
sell
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animal
skins, horns etc. They hunt
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animals
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so
that they can sell their body parts and
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make
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good
amount of money.
For instance
,
even though
the hunting of Rhinoceros
is banned
in India,
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
still
kill them and sell their horns. They should
be protected
from the hunters and there should be proper conservation parks where they can
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live
.

In conclusion
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
factors which lead the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
to the verge of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
extinction
. It should be our duty to protect them and take proper measures to save the environment. They have the same right of the Earth as the humans do.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels such as coal，oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. Recently, in some countries, the use of alternative energy including wind and solar power has been encouraged，Is this trend a postive or a negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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