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You have a bicycle that you are no longer using. You would like to sell it to a friend. write a letter to your friend. In your letterexplain why you are no longer using your bicycle. describe your bicycle. explain why you think your friend would like to have v.2

You have a bicycle that you are no longer using. You would like to sell it to a friend. write a letter to your friend. In your letterexplain why you are no longer using your bicycle. describe your bicycle. explain why you think your friend would like to have v. 2
Dear Anubav, Hope you are doing well. I would like to sell my bicycle to you because I' m not using it any longer. The company which I joined recently, is far away from my home so it is not possible for me to go by cycle hereafter. Moreover, I often travel by bus or train to my office. My bicycle is an old BSA model but I customised it when I was using it. The colour is metallic red and the handle bars are very comfortable to drive. The seat is a cushion type which is covered by synthetic leather. The wheels are made of alloy with five adjustable gears and it also has front and back disc brakes which would be perfect for a smooth and safe ride for long distances. Though, I won' t be using it any more, I decided to give it particularly to you. Because, I know that you are taking your car often to the supermarket that is just 6 kms from your house. You can use my cycle which could be more convenient while moving in the traffic and will also be a good exercise. I hope it could be very useful to you. Please let me know if you are interested to buy. Waiting to hear from you. Yours lovingly, Felix
Dear
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Anubav
,

Hope you are doing well. I would like to sell my bicycle to you
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because
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I&
#039; m not using it any longer. The
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company
which I
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joined
recently, is far away from my home
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so
it is not possible for me to go by cycle hereafter.
Moreover
, I
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often
travel by bus or train to my office.

My bicycle is an
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old
BSA model
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but
I
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customised
it when I was using it. The
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colour
is metallic red and the handle bars are
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very
comfortable to drive. The seat is a cushion type which
is covered
by synthetic leather.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
wheels
are made
of alloy with five adjustable gears and it
also
has front and back disc brakes which would be perfect for a smooth and safe ride for long distances.

Though, I
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won&
#039; t be using it
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
, I decided to give it
particularly
to you.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
, I know that you are taking your car
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often
to the supermarket
that is
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just
6
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kms
from your
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house
. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
my cycle which could be more convenient while moving in the traffic and will
also
be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
exercise. I hope it could be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
useful to you.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know if you
are interested
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
.

Waiting to hear from you.

Yours
lovingly
,

Felix
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have a bicycle that you are no longer using. You would like to sell it to a friend. write a letter to your friend. In your letterexplain why you are no longer using your bicycle. describe your bicycle. explain why you think your friend would like to have v. 2

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
219 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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