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You can get up-to-date news from the radio, TV and the Internet. Which kind of media do you think is the best to get the news? v.2

You can get up-to-date news from the radio, TV and the Internet. Which kind of media do you think is the best to get the news? v. 2
Nowadays, there are several channels to get news, such as the radio, TV, newspapers and the Internet. I think the Internet is the best among these. In my essay, I am going to explain why. Since its invention, the Internet has been booming as a prospective industry. Not only because it is a combination of text, audio and video, but also due to its convinience. It has threatened the domination of spreading news of the traditional media, and, I would say, is about to take control. We can find everything we want on the Internet – the latest news, books, songs, movies, cartoons… whatever. With the radio, we can merely hear. Compared to a newspaper, the radio and TV can provide the latest information. For instance the breaking news of the Americans’ attacking Iraq was immediately availalbe online, as well as that the Twin Towers of New York were destroyed on September 11, 2001. However, we just cannot carry TV 24/7. The Internet is a convinient way of getting information, as long as your mobile phone is connected or you possess a laptop. When I am on a vehicle, I usually have my cellphone connected to the Internet, then browse through whathappend in the past few hours, or log in MSN to begin a conversation with my friends. Reading a newspaper is also a good way to kill time, but for me, a youngster, it is not so modern as “surfing online while commuting”. The traditional media will never disappear, though the Internet has taken a big advantage in the competition. And definitely, there is still a long way for the Internet to go. Anyway, the Internet benefits me the most, and I highly appreciate it.
Nowadays, there are several channels to
get
news
, such as the radio, TV, newspapers and the Internet. I
think
the Internet is the best among these. In my essay, I am going to
explain
why.

Since its invention, the Internet has been booming as a prospective industry. Not
only
because
it is a combination of text, audio and video,
but
also
due to its
convinience
. It has threatened the domination of spreading
news
of the traditional media, and, I would say, is about to take control.

We can find everything we want on the Internet
the latest
news
, books, songs, movies, cartoons… whatever. With the radio, we can
merely
hear. Compared to a newspaper, the radio and TV can provide the latest information.
For instance
the breaking
news
of the Americans’ attacking Iraq was immediately
availalbe
online,
as well
as that the Twin Towers of
New
York were
destroyed
on September 11, 2001.
However
, we
just
cannot carry TV 24/7.

The Internet is a
convinient
way of getting information, as long as your mobile phone
is connected
or you possess a laptop. When I am on a vehicle, I
usually
have my cellphone connected to the Internet, then browse through
whathappend
in the past few hours, or log in MSN to
begin
a conversation with my friends. Reading a newspaper is
also
a
good
way to kill time,
but
for me, a youngster, it is not
so
modern as “surfing online while commuting”.

The traditional media will never disappear, though the Internet has taken a
big
advantage in the competition. And definitely, there is
still
a long way for the Internet to go. Anyway, the Internet benefits me the most, and I
highly
appreciate it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay You can get up-to-date news from the radio, TV and the Internet. Which kind of media do you think is the best to get the news? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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