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Some people think that radio has become out-of-date, and there is no need to listen to the radio for entertainment and news. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

It has been argued that while the radio is not as frequently used and popular as before, there is no need for it nowadays. I assume, although other platforms may have overtaken radio in popularity and user satisfactory, radio still has its own fans and advocates that definitely would not be pleased shutting down radio. Many years ago a famous song titled “video killed the radio stars” directly opined that radio programs are not as appealing as they used to be after television advent in domestic usage. Nowadays diversity and attractiveness of new medium are so significant that not only T. V cables are not interesting anymore, but radio has been scarcely listened to. People are less reluctant to follow radio programs neither for news reports or entertaining. Hence, a bureau for radio stations and radio stations and its programs may seem unduly in their point of view. On the other hand, although the majority of modernized human beings are not interested in radio as their ancestors used to be. Radio still has its own permanent listeners. Many drivers are the biggest fans of radio programs, rangers and soldiers who work in remote areas are big advocates of radio to distract themselves from boredom. I myself, prefer listening to radio programs, instead of my selected songs, whenever I’m driving. Besides, among other platforms like TV cables, the internet or even game consoles, radio is an exceptual media which has always been free for its users, and people can enjoy listening to its programs in every part of the world without being worried about paying any fee. In conclusion, I agree that the majority of nowadays human beings are not pleased with radio programs anymore, but there are some minorities who find this media interesting and functional.
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used
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before
, there is no need for it nowadays. I assume, although other platforms may have overtaken
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radio
in popularity and user satisfactory,
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still
has its
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own
fans and advocates that definitely would not be
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pleased
shutting down radio.

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years ago a
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famous
song titled “video killed the
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stars”
directly
opined that
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radio
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programs
are not as appealing as they
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used
to be after television advent in domestic usage. Nowadays diversity and attractiveness of new medium are
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so
significant that not
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radio
has been
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listened to.
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People
are less reluctant to follow
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radio
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programs
neither for news reports
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or
entertaining.
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, a bureau for
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radio
stations and
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radio
stations and its
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programs
may seem
unduly
in their point of view.

On the other hand
, although the majority of modernized human beings are not interested in
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radio
as their ancestors
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used
to be.
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still
has its
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own
permanent listeners.
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Many
drivers are the biggest fans of
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radio
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programs
, rangers and soldiers who work in remote areas are
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big
advocates of
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radio
to distract themselves from boredom. I myself, prefer listening to
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radio
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programs
,
instead
of my selected songs, whenever I’m driving.
Besides
, among other platforms like TV cables, the internet or even game consoles,
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radio
is an
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exceptual
media which has always been free for its users, and
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people
can enjoy listening to its
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programs
in every part of the world without
being worried
about paying any fee.

In conclusion
, I
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agree
that the majority of nowadays human beings are not
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pleased
with
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radio
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programs
anymore,
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but
there are
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some
minorities who find this media interesting and functional.
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IELTS essay The radio has become an out-of-date means of communication. There is no need for it nowadays because of the fact that we now possess better ways of obtaining news and entertainment. with this?

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296 words
6.0
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