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You are study for qualification and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter. -Ask for sometime of the complete a qualification-suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. -Say how the v.1

You are study for qualification and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter. -Ask for sometime of the complete a qualification-suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. -Say how the v. 1
There is a popular saying that health is wealth. While some people may argue that good health care do not guarantee healthy liveness, I am of the opinion that the quality of available health care facilities contribute tremendously to the well being of the populace. This essay will discuss both views. My reasons are not far fetched. Firstly, medical facilities put in place to provide the required care in the times of need, assist to provide the assurances of prompt medical attention; hence improving the chances of survival. For example, about 30 percent of rural women in Nigeria die during childbirth as a result of non availability of facilities which should have ensured regular antenatal and postnatal care. Similarly, there is a 27 percent death rate arising from road accidents in Nigeria as a result of non availability of paramedics in most of the cities in the country. In addition, properly equipped diagnostic laboratories help with an understanding of the health condition of patients before the illness gets to advanced stages where it becomes difficult to curtail. For instance, 20 percent mortality rate for cancer patients in Malawi is attributable to late detection. Conversely, some folks are of the view that no matter how well hospitals are, human beings are destined to die. This spans from religious believes that death is compulsory for all mortals. An example is the fact that even the doctors who give care to patients also die eventually. In summary, adequate and proper health care enhances the quality of lives. It helps to reveal the status of patients in good time. Thus providing the opportunity for swift response and referrals to facilities with experienced personnels with professional expertise.
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health
is wealth. While
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some
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people
may argue that
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good
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health
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care
do not guarantee healthy
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liveness
, I am of the opinion that the quality of available
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health
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care
facilities contribute
tremendously
to the
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well being
of the populace. This essay will discuss both views.

My reasons are not
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far fetched
.
Firstly
, medical facilities put in place to provide the required
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care
in the times of need, assist to provide the assurances of prompt medical attention;
hence
improving the chances of survival.
For example
, about 30 percent of rural women in Nigeria
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die
during childbirth
as a result
of
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non availability
of facilities which should have ensured regular antenatal and postnatal
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care
.
Similarly
, there is a 27 percent death rate arising from road accidents in Nigeria
as a result
of
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non availability
of paramedics in most of the cities in the country.

In addition
,
properly
equipped diagnostic laboratories
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help
with an understanding of the
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health
condition of
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patients
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before
the illness
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gets
to advanced stages where it becomes difficult to curtail.
For instance
, 20 percent mortality rate for cancer
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patients
in Malawi is attributable to late detection.

Conversely
,
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some
folks are of the view that no matter how well hospitals are, human beings
are destined
to
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die
. This spans from religious
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believes
that death is compulsory for all mortals. An example is the fact that even the doctors who give
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care
to
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patients
also
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die
eventually
.

In summary, adequate and proper
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health
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care
enhances the quality of
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lives
. It
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helps
to reveal the status of
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patients
in
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good
time.
Thus
providing the opportunity for swift response and referrals to facilities with experienced
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personnels
with professional expertise.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You are study for qualification and you would like some time off work to complete it. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter. -Ask for sometime of the complete a qualification-suggest what you will do later at work if you have time off. -Say how the v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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