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You are interested in enrolling in a cooking class at a local college and would like a friend to come with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your lettersay where and when the class will be heldgive reasons why you think your friend might be intereste v.1

You are interested in enrolling in a cooking class at a local college and would like a friend to come with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your lettersay where and when the class will be heldgive reasons why you think your friend might be intereste v. 1
Globalisation has made travelling abroad or staying in a remote location far easier than ever before. If you are on a trip somewhere or planning to stay at a place for indefinite time it is always advantageous to rent a house rather than purchasing one. To begin with, people these days like change every so often, which means changing where they stay for any particular amount of time. This is easily possible because of the availability of ready to move in apartments, which can provide amenities on need basis. For example, one doesn't have to go through the hassle of moving all the furniture and utensils every time they move either. This makes them less dependent on their home appliances. This of course comes with its own disadvantages, one can never own too much stuff, which would be left behind if ever they have to move again. There is also a financial disadvantage if you choose to rent an accomodation, for example, you can pay a mortgage instead of rent and the property will be yours, but paying the same amount as rent defeats that purpose. Even if you want to settle down somewhere you can not be paying rent all your life. To conclude, if you are looking to settle down in one place, be it out of necessity or of choice, buying a house can be convenient. However, if you tend to move around different places or stay in any place for a short amount of time, then renting a house is always going to be a better option.
Possible spelling mistake. 'Globalisation' is British English.
Globalisation
has made travelling abroad or staying in a remote location far easier than ever
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before
. If you are on a trip somewhere or planning to stay at a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
for indefinite
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
it is always advantageous to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rent
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
rather
than purchasing one.

To
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begin
with,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
these days like
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
every
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so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
, which means changing where they stay for any particular amount of
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time
. This is
easily
possible
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because
of the availability of ready to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
move
in apartments, which can provide amenities on need basis.
For example
, one doesn't
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go through the hassle of moving all the furniture and utensils every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
move
either. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them less dependent on their home appliances.

This
of course
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comes
with its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
disadvantages, one can never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
too much stuff, which would be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
behind if ever they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
move
again. There is
also
a financial disadvantage if you choose to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rent
an
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accomodation
,
for example
, you can pay a mortgage
instead
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rent
and the property will be yours,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
paying the same amount as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rent
defeats that purpose.
“Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Even if
you want to settle down somewhere you can not be paying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rent
all your life.

To conclude
, if you are looking to settle down in one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
, be it out of necessity or of choice, buying a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
can be convenient.
However
, if you tend to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
move
around
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
or stay in any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
for a short amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, then renting a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is always going to be a better option.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are interested in enrolling in a cooking class at a local college and would like a friend to come with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your lettersay where and when the class will be heldgive reasons why you think your friend might be intereste v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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