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You are facing a problem with your neighbour who is leaving rubbish near your house. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain the problem-Provide an appropriate solution v.1

You are facing a problem with your neighbour who is leaving rubbish near your house. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain the problem-Provide an appropriate solution v. 1
Wild animals are losing their habitats, which is occupied by the increasing number of human beings. Some people supported that government should invest money in protecting endangered animals, it would help to keep those priceless biological genes. However, some people believe protect wild animals is a waste of public money because no place for them to live. I am of the opinion that protecting wild animals has more benefits than drawbacks. Animals are more important part of the ecological system and a world with various genes is more livable and healthy for human. First of all, as we all know, wild animals have an irreplaceable role in preserving and regulating the field environment quality though the food chain. Without wild animals, the forests will be attacked by pest and reproductive problems which is caused by no birds spreading pollen. Besides, the genes carried by wild animals have a potential use that might help or even save our human beings in the future. For instance, scientists have found that the immunity of domesticated cows can be improved by replacing the certain gene with the corresponding gene of wild cows. In my opinion, the habitat of wild animals plays an important role in regulating climate and purifying air, which cannot be replaced by human settlements. Taking Amazon Rain Forest as an example, selva is the main habitat for many wild animals, which it not only absorb carbon dioxide, but also release oxygen. Therefore, the air quality in other places around the world will be improved greatly. As someone once said: ‘Places with plants always have wildlife, the wildlife must live with the plants'. So place for wild animals should and must exist forever. To sum up, I believe that wildlife protection will bring far more gains than losses.
Wild
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animals
are losing their habitats, which
is occupied
by the increasing number of
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human
beings.
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Some
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people
supported that
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government
should invest money in protecting endangered
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animals
, it would
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help
to
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keep
those priceless biological genes.
However
,
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some
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people
believe protect wild
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animals
is a waste of public money
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because
no
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place
for them to
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live
. I am of the opinion that protecting wild
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animals
has more benefits than drawbacks.

Animals are more
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important
part of the ecological system and a world with various genes is more livable and healthy for
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human
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, as we all know, wild
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animals
have an irreplaceable role in preserving and regulating the field environment quality though the food chain. Without wild
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animals
, the forests will
be attacked
by pest and reproductive problems which
is caused
by no birds spreading pollen.
Besides
, the genes carried by wild
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animals
have a potential
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use
that might
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help
or even save our
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human
beings in the future.
For instance
, scientists have found that the immunity of domesticated cows can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
by replacing the certain gene with the corresponding gene of wild cows.

In my opinion, the habitat of wild
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animals
plays an
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important
role in regulating climate and purifying air, which cannot
be replaced
by
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human
settlements. Taking Amazon Rain Forest as an example,
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selva
is the main habitat for
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many
wild
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animals
, which it not
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only
absorb carbon dioxide,
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but
also
release oxygen.
Therefore
, the air quality in other
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places
around the world will be
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improved
greatly
. As someone once said:
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‘Places
with plants always have wildlife, the wildlife
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must
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live
with the plants'.
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So
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place
for wild
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animals
should and
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must
exist forever.

To sum up, I believe that wildlife protection will bring far more gains than losses.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You are facing a problem with your neighbour who is leaving rubbish near your house. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter- introduce yourself- explain the problem-Provide an appropriate solution v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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