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You are attending a night college. You are not happy about a course you are doing. Write a letter to the director. Describe the following: 1)What your course is? 2)Why are you not happy about it? 3)What you want them to do? v.1

You are attending a night college. You are not happy about a course you are doing. Write a letter to the director. Describe the following: 1)What your course is? 2)Why are you not happy about it? 3)What you want them to do? v. 1
Ever since the modern education system was introduced, universities have been exploring novel ways and modes of learning. One recent addition requires students to work in another country as a part of their degree programs. Though some might disagree, others tend to believe that it is quite beneficial for the students. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad. Starting with the upsides, attending a better institute in a developed country increases exposures and provides a better learning environment. Consider an example of a medical student who gets a fellowship in the USA or UK. He will get hands-on experience of complicated procedures which are not performed at his parent institute. Moreover, as this student might get to work with the best scholars of the world, he is likely to be inspired and may go on to become a scholar himself. Thus, the chances of a student's bright future will be increased if he gets to work in a better place. The downsides of studying in a foreign country include the financial burden on the student as he may have to work overtime to meet both ends. Frequently, since it puts unwanted and extra pressure on students, they may not be able to concentrate on studies. Furthermore, some graduates tend not to return to their country, and it leads to a brain drain. These youngsters are the future of the nation; as a result, it suffers a significant loss in the workforce. Hence, both the students and states bear the adverse effects of this modality of learning. To conclude, many students now study in a remote country as a part of their graduation. It enables them to interact with the best teachers, polish their skill, and encourages them to excel. However, it seems that students might find it difficult financially, and it may lead to talent drain.
Ever since the modern education system
was introduced
, universities have been exploring novel ways and modes of learning. One recent addition requires
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students
to
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work
in another
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country
as a part of their degree programs. Though
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some
might disagree, others tend to believe that it is quite beneficial for the
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students
. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

Starting with the upsides, attending a better institute in a developed
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country
increases exposures and provides a better learning environment. Consider an example of a medical
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student
who
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gets
a fellowship in the USA or UK. He will
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get
hands-on experience of complicated procedures which are not performed at his parent institute.
Moreover
, as this
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student
might
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get
to
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work
with the best scholars of the world, he is likely to
be inspired
and may go on to become a scholar himself.
Thus
, the chances of a student's bright future will
be increased
if he
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gets
to
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work
in a better place.

The downsides of studying in a foreign
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country
include the financial burden on the
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student
as he may
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have to
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work
overtime to
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meet
both ends.
Frequently
, since it puts unwanted and extra pressure on
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students
, they may not be able to concentrate on studies.
Furthermore
,
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some
graduates tend not to return to their
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country
, and it leads to a brain drain. These youngsters are the future of the nation;
as a result
, it suffers a significant loss in the workforce.
Hence
, both the
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students
and states bear the adverse effects of this modality of learning.

To conclude
,
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many
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students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
study in a remote
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
as a part of their graduation. It enables them to interact with the best teachers, polish their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
, and encourages them to excel.
However
, it seems that
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students
might find it difficult
financially
, and it may lead to talent drain.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You are attending a night college. You are not happy about a course you are doing. Write a letter to the director. Describe the following: 1)What your course is? 2)Why are you not happy about it? 3)What you want them to do? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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