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you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people are now less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do v.2

you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people are now less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do v. 2
Shops in cities will close one day due to the increasing popularity of online shopping. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this statement as countless people prefer real-world shopping to online shopping. Shopping online is not available in all parts of the world. For instance, most online shopping websites do not ship to developing countries, which means that people living in these countries have never purchased any items online. As a consequence, it would take years for many individuals to be able to do their shopping online, let alone depending completely on it. Many people do not shop online because they prefer the experience of shopping in cities and towns. Going out with families and friends to shop is a unique and a satisfying experience that many people favour. Moreover, online shopping prevents customers from seeing the item and checking it in real life. in other words, goods such as clothes and shoes are hard to purchase online because people need to check their materials and try them on to see how they look on them. Finally, some people are afraid of online shopping because of cybercriminals. When people shop online, they are exposed to hackers if the website is not secure and, consequently, their personal information, including their bank accounts and passwords, can be stolen. Furthermore, some dealers are untrustworthy and might send an empty package after receiving their money. This can be exemplified by websites like eBay which have many dealers who trick people and send them a used product or an empty package. In conclusion, shops in cities will continue to thrive as countless people prefer them to online shopping websites. This is due to their availability everywhere, security, and the pleasant experience that they offer.
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Shops
in cities will close one day due to the increasing popularity of
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online
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shopping
. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this statement as countless
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people
prefer real-world
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shopping
to
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online
shopping.

Shopping
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online
is not available in all parts of the world.
For instance
, most
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online
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shopping
websites do not ship to
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developing countries
, which means that
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people
living in these countries have never
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purchased
any items
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online
. As a consequence, it would take years for
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many
individuals to be able to do their
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shopping
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online
,
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let
alone depending completely on it.

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Many
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people
do not
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shop
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online
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because
they prefer the experience of
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shopping
in cities and towns. Going out with families and friends to
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shop
is a unique and a satisfying experience that
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many
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people
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
.
Moreover
,
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online
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shopping
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevents
customers from seeing the item and checking it in real life.
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in
other words,
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goods
such as clothes and shoes are
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hard
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
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online
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because
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people
need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
their materials and try them on to
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see
how they look on them.

Finally
,
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some
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people
are afraid of
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online
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shopping
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of cybercriminals. When
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people
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shop
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online
, they
are exposed
to hackers if the
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website
is not secure and,
consequently
, their personal information, including their bank accounts and passwords, can
be stolen
.
Furthermore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
dealers are untrustworthy and might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
an empty package after receiving their money. This can
be exemplified
by websites like eBay which have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
dealers who trick
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people
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
them a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
product or an empty package.

In conclusion
,
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shops
in cities will continue to thrive as countless
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer them to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
websites. This is due to their availability everywhere, security, and the pleasant experience that they offer.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people are now less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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