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Some people believe that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit culture and tourist attraction in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.1

Some people believe that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit culture and tourist attraction in a country. v. 1
It is the fact that food, house and clothes are basic necessities of human to live in today’s world. As everyone cannot afford buying a house, some people believe to provide house to such misfortune people by government. However, I believe that such schemes would result in inflation in economy unless a proper location system is prepared. If everyone owns a house, people have more money to spend on other things. They will buy new clothes, arrange international trips, for instance, increase in more disposable income. Although people will invest money, spending on luxurious items will increase a lot. In fact, people will change the product more often than their usual life. Evidently, such higher spendings would lead to inflation in the economy. However, the prices of housing will affect a lot. People invest funds in building houses and renting to others. The strategy to provide free housing will affect a lot of such investors as prices of homes will reach at its lowest rate. As anybody is having a dwelling, no one will spent on building a new unless a luxurious home is required. For instance, a recent scheme by the government of the India for providing homes at a subsidised rate results in sharply falling prices of residence. People will refrain themselves from investing their hard earned wages in housing sector due to such steps by government. To sum up, the idea to provide free housing for everybody who cannot afford is impacting enormously on the economy and its constitution. It should not be done unless the income disparity is prevailing in the market.
It is the fact that food,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
and clothes are
Consider using "necessities".
basic necessities
of human to
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live
in
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today
’s world. As everyone cannot afford
If 'afford' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to buy".
buying
a
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house
,
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some
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people
believe to provide
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house
to such misfortune
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people
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.
However
, I believe that such schemes would result in inflation in economy unless a proper location system
is prepared
.

If everyone
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owns
a
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house
,
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people
have more money to spend on other things. They will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
new clothes, arrange international trips,
for instance
, increase in more disposable income. Although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will invest money, spending on luxurious items will increase a lot. In fact,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the product more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
than their usual life.
Evidently
, such higher
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spendings
would lead to inflation in the economy.

However
, the prices of housing will affect a lot.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
invest funds in building
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
houses
and renting to others. The strategy to provide free housing will affect
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
such investors as prices of homes will reach at its lowest rate. As anybody is having a dwelling, no one will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "spend"
spent
on building a new unless a luxurious home
is required
.
For instance
, a recent scheme by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of the India for providing homes at a
Possible spelling mistake. 'subsidised' is British English.
subsidised
rate results in
sharply
falling prices of residence.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
will refrain themselves from investing their
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
hard earned
wages in housing sector due to such steps by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.

To sum up, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to provide free housing for everybody who cannot afford is impacting
enormously
on the economy and its constitution. It should not
be done
unless the income disparity is prevailing in the market.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit culture and tourist attraction in a country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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