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Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000
These days, a lot of dynamics to our environmental climates. These recent changes have sparked a number of controversial debates on how best to tackle these issues that are emanating. While some people believe that climate change should be prevented, others are of the opinion that we must find a way of adapting to it. I totally agree that these changes should be prevented. This essay will argue why I agree with this view and discuss it with examples. There are numerous reasons why I believe that our climate should be conserved from further damages. One of these is because of the detrimental effects that would bring to the human populace. A good example of this is depletion of the ozone layer due to pollution, which may possibly lead to the occurrence of some certain types of cancer. If nothing is done to deal with climate change, the society in general may suffer. Furthermore, another reason why climate change should be prevented is because of the harmful consequences it may have on livestocks and plants. For instance, some plant growth may be disrupted by toxic gases. Consequently, this would result in the disruption of the food chain. However, people who believe that we should live with climate change have argued that some of its causes are not man-made. Hence, it is beyond human control. To sum up, although some of the causes of climate change are not as a result of man's action or inaction, I still agree that it should be prevented in our own capacities. Individuals and government should work towards environmentally friendly procedures.
These days,
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a lot of
dynamics to our environmental
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climates
. These recent
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changes
have sparked a number of controversial debates on how best to tackle these issues that are emanating. While
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some
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people
believe that
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climate
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change
should be
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prevented
, others are of the opinion that we
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must
find a way of adapting to it. I
totally
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agree
that these
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changes
should be
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prevented
. This essay will argue why I
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agree
with this view and discuss it with examples.

There are numerous reasons why I believe that our
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climate
should
be conserved
from
further
damages. One of these is
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because
of the detrimental effects that would bring to the human populace. A
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good
example of this is depletion of the ozone layer due to pollution, which may
possibly
lead to the occurrence of
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some
certain types of cancer. If nothing
is done
to deal with
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climate
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change
, the society
in general
may suffer.

Furthermore
, another reason why
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climate
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change
should be
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prevented
is
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because
of the harmful consequences it may have on
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livestocks
and plants.
For instance
,
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some
plant growth may
be disrupted
by toxic gases.
Consequently
, this would result in the disruption of the food chain.

However
,
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people
who believe that we should
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live
with
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climate
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change
have argued that
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some
of its causes are not
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man
-made.
Hence
, it is beyond human control.

To sum up, although
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some of the
causes of
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climate
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change
are not
as a result
of
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man
's action or inaction, I
still
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agree
that it should be
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prevented
in our
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own
capacities. Individuals and
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government
should work towards
environmentally
friendly procedures.
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IELTS essay Writing task 1 the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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