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the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000. v.2

the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000. v. 2
The given pie charts illustrate a large discrepancy between the percentage of fuel source which is an electricity production in two different countries Australia and France from 1980 to 2000. Overall, Australia in 2000 was accounted for the highest of total electricity production in comparison with the others. Besides, there was vast change in the units of electricity by fuel source over the given period. In Australia, not only the total production in 2000 constitute 170 units of electricity, but it also was higher than that of 1980, which stood at 100 units. Moreover, in 1980, the percentage of coal was 50%, which was the highest comparing to the others, then dramatically increased to 130% in 2000. In addition, the proportion of the hydro power gradually rose from 20% in 1980 to 36% in 2000. While, there was a sharply decrease in the most figures in 2000. In France, there was a fluctuation of 25% in the figure of coal over the 20-year period, while, the percentage of nuclear power was seen in the significant growth of 111%. Additionally, the year 2000 experienced a marginal development of 5% in the percentage of oil. Meanwhile, that of hydro power and natural gas was vanished in 2000.
The
given
pie charts illustrate a large discrepancy between the
percentage
of fuel source which is an
electricity
production in two
different
countries Australia and France from 1980 to 2000.

Overall
, Australia in 2000
was accounted
for the highest of total
electricity
production
in comparison
with the others.
Besides
, there was vast
change
in the units of
electricity
by fuel source over the
given
period.

In Australia, not
only
the total production in 2000 constitute 170 units of
electricity
,
but
it
also
was higher than that of 1980, which stood at 100 units.
Moreover
, in 1980, the
percentage
of coal was 50%, which was the highest comparing to the others, then
dramatically
increased to 130% in 2000.
In addition
, the proportion of the
hydro power
gradually
rose from 20% in 1980 to 36% in 2000.
While
, there was a
sharply decrease
in the most figures in 2000.

In France, there was a fluctuation of 25% in the figure of coal over the 20-year period, while, the
percentage
of nuclear power was
seen
in the significant growth of 111%.
Additionally
, the year 2000 experienced a marginal development of 5% in the
percentage
of oil. Meanwhile, that of
hydro power
and natural gas
was vanished
in 2000.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay the pie chart below show units of electricity production by fuel source in australia and france in 1980 and 2000. v. 2

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