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Writing Task 1 (at least 150 words)The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. images: v.1

Writing Task 1 (at least 150 words)The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries.
It is observed that some children are gifted with a huge amount of toys from their parents. Toys, in the modern world, help to achieve better cognitive development, however, the downside is that offspring tends to lose interest quickly because of having too many play items. To begin with, in the present context, toys consist with many techniques, which contribute towards the brain enhancement of the children. In other words, items such as puzzles construct the thought process, while the building blocks teach the balance and coordination. Moreover, many educational toys are available today, which are capable of teaching colour separation, words, letters and even various sounds. Therefore, having many toys can be beneficial in terms of education. For instance, as per a report published in the Science Magazine in 2015, 75% of children, who had the chance to play with modern high tech toys, were capable of grasping basic math quickly than their counterparts. On the contrary, having too many toys deteriorate the children’s ability to concentrate. Offspring tend to lose interest, when they have a wide choice, which is largely detrimental to their future as they would not be able to concentrate on their studies as well as on their social life. This is illustrated by the results of a study conducted by the University of London in 2017, which said that students who had an enormous amount of various toys during their childhood, found many difficulties in continuing their higher education since they are incapable of deep concentration. To conclude, even though it is advantageous for children to have many toys in developing their cognitive development in the early childhood, it also has demerits because it creates a generation of people who lose interest of something quickly.
It
is observed
that
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some
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children
are gifted
with a huge amount of
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toys
from their parents.
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Toys
, in the modern world,
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help
to achieve better cognitive development,
however
, the downside is that offspring tends to lose interest
quickly
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because
of having too
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many
play items.

To
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begin
with, in the present context,
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toys
consist with
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many
techniques, which contribute towards the brain enhancement of the
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children
.
In other words
, items such as puzzles construct the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
process, while the building blocks teach the balance and coordination.
Moreover
,
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many
educational
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toys
are available
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today
, which are capable of teaching
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colour
separation, words, letters and even various sounds.
Therefore
, having
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
toys
can be beneficial in terms of education.
For instance
, as per a report published in the Science Magazine in 2015, 75% of
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children
, who had the chance to play with modern high tech
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
toys
, were capable of grasping basic math
Use "(quickly)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
quickly
than their counterparts.

On the contrary
, having too
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many
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toys
deteriorate the
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children’s
ability to concentrate. Offspring tend to lose interest, when they have a wide choice, which is
largely
detrimental to their future as they would not be able to concentrate on their studies
as well
as on their social life. This
is illustrated
by the results of a study conducted by the University of London in 2017, which said that students who had an enormous amount of various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
toys
during their childhood, found
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many
difficulties in continuing their higher education since they are incapable of deep concentration.

To conclude
,
even though
it is advantageous for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
toys
in developing their cognitive development in the early childhood, it
also
has demerits
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because
it creates a generation of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who lose interest of something
quickly
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Writing Task 1 (at least 150 words)The pie charts below show how dangerous waste products are dealt with in three countries.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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