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The graphs below show some trends in visits to the UK by overseas residents and visits overseas by UK residents between 1982 and 2002 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant Write at least v.1

The graphs below show some trends in visits to the UK by overseas residents and visits overseas by UK residents between 1982 and 2002
In the society of the digital age, people can say or display whatever they like without considering the impacts that it would have on other people. There is little doubt that some people would say things on the internet that they would never say it or display illegal materials that they would never show others in their real life. Firstly, since people can have an anonymous account, some people would take it as a barrier; they tend to rent their anger towards others. Negative comments are evidence of this kind of action, and it is typically happening to famous people. Looking at the comments under any picture posted by famous people and you would see rude, nasty, and harsh comments; criticising their outfit, appearance, or even the way they stand. Consequently, it will be result in superbly, and this would then create severe mental issues on others, such as suffering depression. On the other hand, a considerable proportion of deaths in the 21st-century are caused by suicide, and superbly is one of the factors that leads someone to become suicidal. A great example of this is, in 2019, a Korean female actress, in the age of 25, has ended her life in her department. As her death news came out, every Netizen believed that superbly killed her. When she posts any picture, people would come and comment to her as a vamp, undignified, and ill-manner. It is believed that negative comments lead the actress to suffer depression, and finally, it has become a rope that hangs the actress in her department. In conclusion, people should not say whatever they like irrespective of the impacts it would result in. However, with the support of the digital age, there are a significant proportion of people who hide behind their anonymous account and post negative comments about others. Consequently, this kind of immoral action is leading to a tragedy.
In the society of the digital age,
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people
can say or display whatever they like without considering the impacts that it would have on
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other
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people
. There is
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little
doubt that
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some
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people
would say things on the internet that they would never say it or display illegal materials that they would never
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show
others in their real life.

Firstly
, since
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people
can have an anonymous account,
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some
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people
would take it as a barrier; they tend to rent their anger towards others.
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Negative
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comments
are evidence of this kind of action, and it is
typically
happening to
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famous
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people
. Looking at the
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comments
under any picture posted by
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famous
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people
and you would
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see
rude, nasty, and harsh
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comments
;
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criticising
their outfit, appearance, or even the way they stand.
Consequently
, it will be result in
superbly
, and this would then create severe mental issues on others, such as suffering depression.

On the
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other
hand, a considerable proportion of deaths in the 21st-century
are caused
by suicide, and
superbly
is one of the factors that leads someone to become suicidal. A great example of this is, in 2019, a Korean
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female actress
, in the age of 25, has ended her life in her department. As her death news came out, every Netizen believed that
superbly
killed her. When she posts any picture,
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people
would
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come
and
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comment
to her as a vamp, undignified, and ill-manner. It
is believed
that
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negative
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comments
lead the actress to suffer depression, and
finally
, it has become a rope that hangs the actress in her department.

In conclusion
,
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people
should not say whatever they like irrespective of the impacts it would result in.
However
, with the support of the digital age, there are a significant proportion of
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people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hide
behind their anonymous account and post
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negative
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comments
about others.
Consequently
, this kind of immoral action is leading to a tragedy.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The graphs below show some trends in visits to the UK by overseas residents and visits overseas by UK residents between 1982 and 2002

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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